Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 문법적으로 어색하고 반복이 많습니다. 먼저 동사 형태(예: love to take, go traveling)를 고쳐 자연스럽게 말하세요. 핵심 문장 한두 개로 직접 답한 뒤에 한두 개의 구체적 이유나 예시로 보충하세요. 불필요한 감탄사(Oh umm)와 중복 표현(‘a lot of pictures’, ‘different views’ 반복)을 줄이고 연결어(for example, because)를 사용해 논리적으로 말하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I often travel abroad with a good camera because I enjoy capturing landscapes and city scenes. For example, last year I photographed coastal cliffs and colorful markets, which helped me remember the trip.

Sugestão: 의미 전달이 불명확하고 문법과 어휘 사용이 부정확합니다. 'prefer'에 직접 답하는 문장(예: I prefer urban views)을 먼저 말하고, 이유를 명확하고 구체적으로 제시하세요. 연결어(because, so, therefore)를 적절히 사용하고 모호한 표현('draw about it', 'curling')은 정확한 단어로 바꾸세요.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy of the city and the interesting architecture. For instance, I like photographing modern buildings and busy streets, which feel lively and inspire me creatively.

Sugestão: 답변이 반복적이고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 먼저 간단히 선호를 밝히고(Better: I prefer views in my own country), 구체적 이유(예: Busan's coastline, familiar scenery)를 추가하세요. 중복 표현('a lot of a lot')을 피하고 형용사 배치를 자연스럽게 고치세요. 감정이나 구체적 이미지(blue sea, colorful sunsets)를 덧붙이면 더 좋습니다.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country, especially around Busan. The city has beautiful coastal scenery with wide blue seas and colorful sunsets, and I enjoy taking photos near my home because the familiar landscapes are very relaxing.

× I love to taking picture of the different views.

✓ I love taking pictures of different views.

The verb after 'love' should be either the base form with 'to' (to take) or the gerund without 'to' (taking). 'to taking' mixes forms and is incorrect. Also 'picture' should be plural as a general activity and drop 'the' before 'different views.' Suggestion: say 'I love taking pictures of different views.'

× Oh umm my hobby is go traveling for another country.

✓ Oh, umm, my hobby is traveling to other countries.

After 'is' (linking verb) use a noun or gerund: 'traveling' not 'go traveling.' Use 'to other countries' rather than 'for another country.' Also plural 'countries' fits the general hobby. Suggestion: use 'my hobby is traveling to other countries.'

× I had a good camera for the good view and I want to take it for a lot of pictures of another view.

✓ I have a good camera for taking pictures of nice views, and I want to use it to take a lot of photos of different scenes.

Tense mismatch: 'I had' should be present 'I have' to match 'I want.' 'for the good view' is awkward; use 'for taking pictures of nice views.' 'take it for a lot of pictures' is incorrect phrasing; use 'use it to take a lot of photos.' 'another view' is vague; 'different scenes' is clearer. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense and natural collocations: 'have a camera,' 'take pictures of views.'

× I prepare view in urban area because it is naturally view can make my feel very confident.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because the natural scenery there makes me feel very confident.

'Prepare' is incorrect; likely 'prefer.' 'view in urban area' needs plural and article: 'views in urban areas.' The phrase 'it is naturally view' is ungrammatical; use 'the natural scenery there.' 'can make my feel' should be 'makes me feel.' Suggestion: use 'prefer' and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct pronoun 'me.'

× So I'm feeling good and I want to draw about it for the green view about curling.

✓ So I feel good, and I want to paint it, especially the green, curving views.

'Draw about it for the green view about curling' is unclear and ungrammatical. Use 'paint' or 'draw it' and describe the subject: 'green, curving views' if intended. 'I'm feeling good' can be simplified to 'I feel good.' Suggestion: choose precise verbs and clear noun phrases: 'I want to paint the green, curving scenery.'

× I prepare in my own country because my own country is Busan and Busan has a lot of a lot of the big ocean view.

✓ I prefer my own country because I am from Busan, and Busan has many great ocean views.

'Prepare' is wrong; use 'prefer.' Repetition 'a lot of a lot of' must be removed. 'the big ocean view' should be plural 'ocean views' and 'great' or 'beautiful' is more natural. Also clarify 'my own country is Busan' to 'I am from Busan.' Suggestion: avoid repetition and use natural collocations like 'many ocean views.'

× So I I like to see the view on my house too.

✓ So I also like to see the view from my house.

'See the view on my house' is incorrect preposition; use 'from my house.' Remove duplicate 'I.' Suggestion: use 'from' to indicate vantage point and avoid repeated words.

× I like the blue big view and colorful.

✓ I like the big blue view and the colorful scenery.

Adjective order in English places size before color: 'big blue' is acceptable but more natural 'big, blue view' or 'big blue view.' 'and colorful' is incomplete; specify 'colorful scenery.' Suggestion: use correct adjective order and complete the noun phrase: 'big blue view' and 'colorful scenery.'