Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors (e.g., 'taking pictures' plural, 'pictures of different views'). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy like 'everything I see basically.'

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel abroad because they become lasting memories. For example, I often photograph local architecture and landscapes to remember the atmosphere of a place.

Sugestão: Correct grammar and reduce repetition. Give a clear preference in the topic sentence, then provide two specific reasons linked with connectors (because, whereas, although). Avoid repeating the preference multiple times.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they often reflect history and have a peaceful, mysterious atmosphere. Although urban areas are lively and full of interesting street scenes, I usually choose rural landscapes for their tranquility and historical character.

Sugestão: Avoid repetitive phrases like 'to be honest' and 'in my honest opinion.' Start with a clear statement of current preference and explain the change with specific reasons. Use linking words to show contrast (however, recently).

Exemplo: I used to prefer views in other countries because unfamiliar places felt more exciting and memorable. However, recently I've started appreciating views in my home country more, particularly the interesting local architecture, which I now notice when I look around.

× Yes, I do like taking picture of different views, especially when I'm traveling abroad because I get to have them as memories when I look back at my photo album.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views, especially when I'm traveling abroad because I get to have them as memories when I look back at my photo album.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to agree with 'different views' and with the general plural sense; use plural for countable nouns when referring to more than one or to a general collection. Suggestion: Use 'pictures' whenever referring to multiple images.

× Otherwise I like to take photos of people, nature, architecture, everything I see basically.

✓ Otherwise I like to take photos of people, nature, architecture, basically everything I see.

The adverbial phrase 'basically' is misplaced at the end; this affects clarity but is primarily a word order/pronoun-related usage. Moving 'basically' before 'everything' creates a smoother, more natural sentence structure. Suggestion: Place adverbs closer to the words they modify: 'basically everything'.

× I prefer views in the rural areas because I feel like the hold so much history and also a bit of mystery.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I feel like they hold so much history and also a bit of mystery.

'the rural areas' is unnecessary; use 'rural areas' for a general idea. Also 'the' before 'rural areas' makes it specific. Additionally, 'the hold' is ungrammatical: a pronoun 'they' is needed to refer back to 'views' and 'hold' requires 'they hold'. Suggestion: Use 'rural areas' for general reference and include the correct pronoun 'they'.

× But I also like urban areas because they're full of people.

✓ But I also like urban areas because they're full of people.

This sentence is correct; no change needed. (Kept to show that third person singular forms like 'they're' and 'is' are used correctly here.)

× It's lively, so much going on.

✓ It's lively; there is so much going on.

The original second part 'so much going on' lacks a finite verb and is a sentence fragment. Adding 'there is' supplies a verb and completes the clause. Suggestion: Use a full clause: 'there is so much going on.'

× But if I would say which one I prefer most, that would be rural areas.

✓ But if I had to say which one I prefer most, it would be rural areas.

Using 'if I would say' is incorrect in English conditionals. Use 'if I had to say' or 'if I were to say' to express a hypothetical choice. Also 'that would be' is more naturally 'it would be' referring to 'which one'. Suggestion: Use appropriate conditional structures: 'if I had to say' or 'if I were to say'.

× To be honest, I usually prefer views in other countries, especially countries I haven't been before because then I can have it as a memory later on in life.

✓ To be honest, I usually prefer views in other countries, especially countries I haven't been to before, because then I can have them as memories later on in life.

Use the preposition 'to' after 'been' when referring to visiting places: 'been to'. 'It' is incorrect pronoun for 'views' (plural); use 'them' and 'memories' should be plural to match 'views'. Suggestion: Use 'been to' for visited places and ensure pronoun number agreement: 'them' and 'memories'.

× But in my honest opinion, lately I've begun to like the views in my home country more than before.

✓ But in my honest opinion, lately I've begun to like the views in my home country more than I did before.

Comparative phrase 'more than before' is acceptable but clearer with an explicit comparator 'more than I did before' to show the change over time. This keeps the present perfect progressive idea intact. Suggestion: Add an explicit comparator for clarity: 'more than I did before.'

× I look up and around more and that's the interesting architecture.

✓ I look up and around more, and that's because of the interesting architecture.

The original sentence 'that's the interesting architecture' is ungrammatical and unclear; it lacks a clear link between increased looking and the reason. Adding 'because of' clarifies the cause-effect relationship. Suggestion: Express cause clearly: 'that's because of the interesting architecture.'