Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct grammar; give clearer specific details and fix vocabulary errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g. “different places” twice) and complete the phrase “Golden hour.”

Exemplo: Yes — I enjoy photographing views because it helps me capture memories and the atmosphere of a place. For example, I often shoot sunsets and wide landscapes during the golden hour, which lets me record warm light and calm moods that remind me of the moment.

Sugestão: Correct pronoun and sentence fragments, and make answers coherent: begin with a direct topic sentence, then add linked specific details. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and correct articles and pluralization (e.g. a lake, green fields, quiet surroundings).

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside is more peaceful and scenic than the city. For example, green fields and a lake with fresh air and quiet surroundings help me relax and clear my mind.

Sugestão: Provide a clear topic sentence and complete your supporting detail; avoid unfinished phrases and awkward comparisons. Use comparative language correctly and add a specific reason or example. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and correct grammar (e.g. “views in my own country”).

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because Nepal has a unique mix of mountains and valleys that I know well. For instance, I enjoy hiking to viewpoints where the landscapes and local culture make the scenery more meaningful to me than similar views abroad.

× Yes I do, I love taking picture of different places because it helps me to capture memories of different places and moments.

✓ Yes, I do. I love taking pictures of different places because it helps me capture memories of different places and moments.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match the general activity of taking multiple photographs (plural agreement). Also, 'helps me to capture' is acceptable but more natural without 'to' after 'helps' when followed by a verb, so use 'helps me capture'. Add a comma after 'Yes' and a period to separate clauses for clarity.

× Not only this but also it helps me to remember how the location felt.

✓ Not only that, but it also helps me remember how the location felt.

Use 'that' instead of 'this' for referring back to the previous clause; the idiomatic structure is 'Not only that, but...'. Also 'helps me to remember' is fine but 'helps me remember' is more natural. Place commas appropriately and remove the extra 'also' ordering: 'but it also'.

× For example, I often photograph casual sunset and scenic landscape during the Golden.

✓ For example, I often photograph casual sunsets and scenic landscapes during the Golden Hour.

Pluralize 'sunset' and 'landscape' because the speaker photographs multiple instances. 'Golden' is incomplete; the correct phrase is 'Golden Hour' to refer to the time of day. Also add 'the' before 'Golden Hour'.

× I prefer you in rural areas because the countryside is more peaceful and scenic than the city.

✓ I prefer rural areas because the countryside is more peaceful and scenic than the city.

'I prefer you in rural areas' incorrectly uses 'you'; the speaker should omit it and say 'I prefer rural areas'. This fixes the pronoun error and makes the sentence subject-consistent.

× For example, looking at. Green fields and lake with fresh air and quiet surrounding helps me relax and clear my mind.

✓ For example, looking at green fields and lakes, with fresh air and quiet surroundings, helps me relax and clear my mind.

Remove the incorrect period after 'at'. Pluralize 'lake' to 'lakes' or use 'a lake' depending on meaning; here plural 'lakes' matches 'fields'. Use plural 'surroundings'. Add commas to set off the descriptive phrase and ensure the sentence has a clear subject and verb agreement: 'looking ... helps'.

× OK, I prefer view in own country because as compared to other countries, I think our country Nepal is more peaceful and rich in scenery, landscapes and so that I can enjoy all the.

✓ OK, I prefer views in my own country because, compared to other countries, I think our country, Nepal, is more peaceful and richer in scenery and landscapes, so I can enjoy them more.

Multiple issues: 'view' should be plural 'views'; include the possessive pronoun 'my' before 'own country'; use 'compared to' instead of 'as compared to'; add commas around 'Nepal' as an appositive; use comparative 'richer' not 'rich'; remove the awkward phrase 'and so that I can enjoy all the' and replace with 'so I can enjoy them more' to complete the thought and use a clear pronoun reference to 'views'.