Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, keep it concise (≤5 sentences), and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words and correct verb forms. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. For example, replace “I saw obsessed” with “I’m obsessed” and clarify what you love about city scenes (shapes, lights, architecture) and mention the sun/moon as examples of subjects you photograph.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. I’m actually a bit obsessed with photography and enjoy capturing scenes I find interesting. For example, in the city I photograph architecture and streetlights because I like the shapes and contrasts, while at dawn or dusk I also enjoy photographing the sun or moon for their colours and mood.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then add specific reasons and one concrete example. Fix grammar (e.g. “I can’t” → incorrect; use “I have” or “I get”) and avoid filler words. Use linking words like “because” and “for example” correctly.

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because I get more variety in natural scenery and it feels more peaceful. For example, I enjoy photographing lakes, forests and mountains where reflections and wildlife create interesting compositions.

Sugestão: Start with a clear statement of preference or mixed feeling, then explain why with specific details. Correct grammatical errors (“I know almost everything” → “I’ve seen most places in my country”), and avoid vague phrases like “new ways” and “take good for us.” Use linking words such as “however” and “for example.”

Exemplo: I like photographing both, but I prefer taking pictures in other countries because everything feels new and inspiring. For example, when I visit a foreign city I enjoy capturing unfamiliar streets, architecture and cultural scenes that I haven’t seen before, which challenges me to try new compositions.

× Yes, actually I think I saw obsessed with take photo with a lot of things that I see, For example the city.

✓ Yes, actually I think I am obsessed with taking photos of a lot of things I see; for example, the city.

Errors: incorrect verb forms ('saw' wrong tense, 'obsessed' needs auxiliary, 'take photo' should be 'taking photos'), incorrect preposition ('with' should be 'of'), and sentence structure/ punctuation. Suggestion: Use present continuous 'am obsessed' to express a current state, use the gerund 'taking' after 'obsessed with', pluralize 'photos', and use 'of' to indicate objects photographed; connect clauses with proper punctuation.

× I love the city because I love the different and tolls in the building, but I I love the sun and the moon.

✓ I love the city because I love the variety and the details in the buildings, and I also love the sun and the moon.

Errors: 'different' is an adjective used incorrectly without a noun; 'tolls' is the wrong word (probably 'details' or 'textures'); 'building' should be plural when referring generally; duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: Use 'variety' or 'different aspects' and 'details' for meaning, make 'buildings' plural, remove duplicate words, and join ideas with 'and' or 'also'.

× I prefer rural areas because I can't the opportunity to see different views and and it's really exciting to see the nature.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I have the opportunity to see different views, and it's really exciting to see nature.

Errors: 'can't' is incorrect here (wrong modal/negation), 'and and' duplicated, unnecessary article 'the' before 'nature'. Suggestion: Use 'have the opportunity' to express positive availability, remove duplicate words, and drop 'the' before uncountable 'nature'.

× So for example, when I there is a lake.

✓ For example, when I visit, there is often a lake.

Errors: sentence fragment and incorrect word order ('when I there is' is ungrammatical). Suggestion: Provide a verb after 'I' such as 'visit' or 'go', or restructure to 'there is a lake when I visit' to form a complete sentence. Also add 'often' or similar if appropriate.

× I love my country, but I know almost everything, so when I have the opportunity to capture the other things and new places and new cities, new ways, I love that take good for us.

✓ I love my country, but I already know almost everything there, so when I have the opportunity to capture new things, new places, and new cities, I enjoy that because it is good for us.

Errors: 'I know almost everything' needs clarity—add 'already' and 'there' to show location; 'the other things' is vague and 'capture' needs objects; 'I love that take good for us' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use 'capture new things' and list nouns consistently, change final clause to 'I enjoy that because it is good for us' or 'I like that because it's beneficial' to convey intended meaning.