Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more relevant to the question (views vs. pets), organize your response with a clear topic sentence, and avoid unnecessary or unclear phrases. Use linking words to add one or two specific supporting details about the kinds of views you like and why. Keep responses concise (maximum 4–5 sentences) and correct simple mistakes (e.g., “gave me a puppy” → “gave me a puppy recently”; “my favorite color” is unclear).

Exemplo: Topic sentence: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph the city skyline at sunset because the changing light creates dramatic colors. Also, I like capturing close-up details of my puppy occasionally to show his expressions, so I sometimes combine pet and landscape shots. Overall, I enjoy images that tell a story.

Sugestão: Make your main idea clear and use accurate vocabulary—say “rural areas” or “the countryside.” Remove unclear phrasing like “a little area” and explain reasons with specific details and linking words (e.g., because, so, therefore). Correct repetition and grammatical errors.

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy peace and open space. For example, mountain views and fresh air help me relax after a busy week, and the slower pace means fewer crowds and less noise. Therefore, I usually choose countryside trips when I want to recharge.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence and give specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small errors and be more precise (e.g., “I have lived there for almost 20 years,” and clarify “St.”). Mention particular places or memories to make the answer more vivid and personal.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my hometown because they feel familiar and comforting. I have lived there for almost 20 years, so the streets and the riverside parks remind me of childhood walks with my family. For instance, watching the sunset from the old bridge always makes me feel nostalgic and relaxed.

× Presently my relatives gave me a puppy.

✓ Recently my relatives gave me a puppy.

The word 'Presently' is incorrect here because it usually means 'soon' rather than 'recently'. This is a word choice/usage issue related to articles/time adverbs; replacing it with 'Recently' correctly indicates a past event. Suggestion: use 'recently' to describe an event that happened in the near past.

× Presently my relatives gave me a puppy.

✓ Recently my relatives gave me a puppy.

The verb 'gave' is past tense and is correct if the action occurred in the past. Combined with 'recently' the tense is appropriate. Suggestion: keep past tense 'gave' when the event happened before now.

× He's my favorite color.

✓ He's my favorite companion.

The original sentence 'He's my favorite color' is semantically and grammatically incorrect: 'color' cannot logically be 'favorite' of a person. This is a vocabulary/word choice problem; to express affection for the puppy, use 'companion' or 'pet'. Suggestion: choose a noun that fits the meaning, e.g., 'companion' or 'pet'.

× I take a lot of photos on my bed every single moment.

✓ I take a lot of photos on my bed all the time.

The phrase 'every single moment' is unnatural; 'all the time' or 'very often' better expresses frequent action. Also 'on my bed' is acceptable if that is where photos are taken. Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions for frequency such as 'all the time' or 'very often'.

× I prefer a little area because I love being coordinated.

✓ I prefer small areas because I love being calm and organized.

'A little area' is awkward here; 'small areas' or 'quiet areas' is more natural. Also 'coordinated' is the wrong adjective for personal disposition; likely intended 'calm' or 'organized'. Suggestion: match number (singular/plural) and choose correct adjective to convey meaning.

× I prefer a little area because I love being coordinated.

✓ I prefer small areas because I love being calm and organized.

Using 'coordinated' to describe a person's preference is incorrect; 'coordinated' usually describes physical coordination. Use adjectives describing mood or order like 'calm' or 'organized'. Suggestion: select adjectives that fit the intended meaning.

× For example, I enjoy mountain views and fresh air, and I found the countryside is much more peaceful than than busy cities.

✓ For example, I enjoy mountain views and fresh air, and I find the countryside much more peaceful than busy cities.

Tense inconsistency: 'found' (past) conflicts with present preference; 'find' (present) matches. Also remove duplicate 'than'. Suggestion: keep present tense when stating general preferences and avoid repeated words.

× For example, I enjoy mountain views and fresh air, and I found the countryside is much more peaceful than than busy cities.

✓ For example, I enjoy mountain views and fresh air, and I find the countryside much more peaceful than busy cities.

The conjunction 'and' is acceptable but the structure 'I found the countryside is' is awkward. Using 'I find the countryside much more peaceful than busy cities' is smoother. Suggestion: use parallel structures for clarity.

× I prefer views in my hometown.

✓ I prefer the views in my hometown.

Including 'the' before 'views' specifies the particular scenery being referred to. Suggestion: use 'the' when talking about specific or known items.

× Uh, I live there on for almost 20 years so the familiar St. and the landscape makes me feel nostalgic and relaxed.

✓ Uh, I have lived there for almost 20 years, so the familiar streets and the landscape make me feel nostalgic and relaxed.

Tense: use present perfect 'have lived' to describe an action that began in the past and continues to the present. Remove extraneous 'on'. 'St.' should be expanded to 'streets' and is plural, so the verb must be 'make' (plural) not 'makes'. Suggestion: use present perfect for duration and ensure subject-verb agreement with plural nouns.

× Uh, I live there on for almost 20 years so the familiar St. and the landscape makes me feel nostalgic and relaxed.

✓ Uh, I have lived there for almost 20 years, so the familiar streets and the landscape make me feel nostalgic and relaxed.

The preposition 'for' is correct for duration but 'on' is extraneous and wrong. Remove 'on'. Suggestion: use 'for' to indicate duration and do not add 'on' in this context.

× Uh, I live there on for almost 20 years so the familiar St. and the landscape makes me feel nostalgic and relaxed.

✓ Uh, I have lived there for almost 20 years, so the familiar streets and the landscape make me feel nostalgic and relaxed.

'the familiar St.' is odd; use 'the familiar streets' to pluralize and specify. 'the landscape' is fine. Suggestion: ensure articles and noun forms match intended meaning.

× The scenery always feels comforting.

✓ The scenery always feels comforting.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed. Explanation: 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and takes singular verb 'feels'; the sentence is appropriate.