Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện rõ ràng và mạch lạc khi trả lời: tránh những tiếng ỳ ừ, sửa ngữ pháp và dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng; giới hạn độ dài (tối đa 4-5 câu) và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn (ví dụ loại cảnh bạn thích, lý do cụ thể). Chú ý dùng cấu trúc ngữ pháp đúng (ví dụ “diverse views” thay cho “a diversity views”) và thay “many a picture of them” bằng “many pictures”.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I especially like landscapes and street scenes because they help me remember places and moments. I hope to become a photographer, so I often practise composing shots and experimenting with light and angles.

Sugestão: Tăng tính chính xác và cụ thể: dùng từ chính xác (ví dụ “fresh air” thay vì “fresher”), sửa các lỗi như “handicraft markers” thành “handicraft markets”, và cấu trúc câu mạch lạc hơn bằng liên từ (e.g., “for example”, “because”). Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể về một lễ hội hoặc sản phẩm thủ công để làm câu trả lời sống động hơn.

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because the air is fresher and people are usually friendlier. For example, I enjoy village festivals in Vietnam where locals sell handicraft markets and traditional foods. These events make me feel more connected to the local community and culture.

Sugestão: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc và ngữ pháp: tránh câu lắp và cấu trúc rời rạc; trả lời trực tiếp với câu chủ đề rõ ràng (ví dụ: “I prefer views in my country” hoặc “I prefer views abroad”), rồi giải thích. Sửa lỗi đặt tên và trật tự từ (ví dụ “places like Sundown Cave or Fukuoka Beach”), và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Thêm so sánh cụ thể giữa trong nước và nước ngoài nếu có thể.

Exemplo: I prefer scenery in my own country because I find local places very beautiful and familiar. For instance, places like Sundown Cave and Fukuoka Beach offer peaceful atmospheres, fresh air, and lovely scenery. Although I haven't travelled widely at home, these spots make me proud of my country’s landscapes.

× I really like it because I really want to keep my memories with a diversity views, uh, with many a picture of them and also my dreams.

✓ I really like it because I want to keep my memories with diverse views, taking many pictures of them and also of my dreams.

Sử dụng lượng từ không đúng: 'a diversity views' and 'many a picture' are incorrect. 'Diverse views' or 'a diversity of views' are correct; 'many pictures' or 'many photos' is correct. Also avoid redundant 'really' and match noun forms. Suggestion: use 'diverse' or 'a diversity of' and 'many pictures'.

× I really want to be a photographer, so I want to take more views of them.

✓ I really want to be a photographer, so I want to take more photos of places and scenes.

Lỗi dùng động từ + -ing: 'take more views of them' is unnatural; 'take photos of' or 'take more pictures of' is correct. 'View' is a noun not typically used with 'take' in this sense. Suggestion: use 'take photos of' or 'photograph'.

× I prefer rural areas because they are much fresher and the locals are very friendly.

✓ I prefer rural areas because the air is fresher there and the locals are very friendly.

Bài dùng mạo từ/thiếu danh từ rõ ràng: 'they are much fresher' lacks clear reference; better to specify 'the air is fresher there'. Also 'much fresher' is acceptable but sounds better with 'fresher' or 'much fresher'. Suggestion: specify what is fresher (air, environment).

× I also enjoy village festivals such as in Vietnam we have their home festival and I prefer more handicraft markers which you don't usually find in a city because they make me feel more connected to the community.

✓ I also enjoy village festivals; for example, in Vietnam we have traditional village festivals, and I prefer handicraft markets that you don't usually find in a city because they make me feel more connected to the community.

Lỗi giới từ và từ vựng: 'such as in Vietnam we have their home festival' is awkward; use 'for example, in Vietnam we have traditional village festivals'. 'Handicraft markers' is wrong word choice; should be 'handicraft markets'. Use 'that' instead of 'which' for essential clause. Suggestion: reorder sentence for clarity and use correct nouns and prepositions.

× I haven't travelled much around my country so I don't have a lot of personal experience to compare.

✓ I haven't traveled much around my country, so I don't have a lot of personal experience to compare.

Khó phân biệt thì: Sentence is mostly correct but American/UK spelling difference 'travelled/traveled'. Keep present perfect 'haven't traveled' to indicate experience to date. Suggestion: keep present perfect; add comma before 'so'.

× However, I've been placed like Sundown Cave or Fukuok Beach have a beautiful scenery, fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere that make me feel that uh, my country's scenery is beautiful. More other countries.

✓ However, places like Sundown Cave or Fukuoka Beach have beautiful scenery, fresh air and a peaceful atmosphere, which make me feel that my country's landscapes are beautiful compared to other countries.

Cấu trúc câu sai: 'I've been placed like Sundown Cave or Fukuok Beach have...' is ungrammatical. 'Fukuok' is misspelled; should be 'Fukuoka'. 'Beautiful scenery' is uncountable so use 'beautiful scenery' not 'a beautiful scenery'. 'Which make' agrees with plural 'places'. 'More other countries' is incorrect; use 'compared to other countries' or 'than in other countries'. Suggestion: restructure to start with 'places like... have' and correct nouns and comparisons.