Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct awkward phrasing, and add one brief reason or example. Keep it to no more than 3–4 sentences and avoid unclear words like “skinny place.” Use linkers if you add details (for example, “because” or “so”).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing places I find beautiful because photos help me remember the atmosphere. For example, when I visit a quiet lake, I take wide shots to capture the reflections and close-ups of interesting details.

Sugestão: Be precise and avoid repetition or unclear phrases. Start with a direct answer (“I prefer both”) then give one or two specific contrasting points using linking words like “however” or “on the other hand.” Correct mistakes such as “hustle and bustle” usage and unclear sentence “Animals creamed.”

Exemplo: I enjoy both, but for different reasons. For instance, rural areas appeal to me because they are peaceful and offer wide natural scenery; on the other hand, urban areas are exciting because of their architecture and busy street life.

Sugestão: Organize facts clearly and correct grammar. Begin with a clear preference sentence, then give specific supporting details about regions using correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Keep it concise and avoid fragmented or incorrect phrases (“South N”, “The mill”). Use linking words like “for example” or “also.”

Exemplo: I prefer the views in my own country because it is very diverse. For example, the north has mountain ranges, the central region features plains and some beaches, and the south has a long coastline, so each region offers different landscapes to enjoy.

× Yes, if I went to a skinny place and I loved the place, then I definitely want to take pictures that can record the beauty of a place and I love to do that.

✓ Yes. If I go to a new place and I like it, I definitely want to take pictures that capture its beauty, and I love doing that.

Multiple issues: conditional and tense mismatch (used past 'went' with present desire) and awkward adjective 'skinny' for place. Use zero/first conditional for habitual preference: 'If I go... I want...' Also replace 'skinny' with 'new' or 'small' and use 'capture its beauty' and 'love doing that' for natural phrasing.

× Both have something different to offer. Rural areas consist of beautiful scenic views that don't have a hustle and bustle, just the clear slow life of rural areas. Animals creamed.

✓ Both offer different things. Rural areas have beautiful scenic views without the hustle and bustle, and they have a calm, slow pace of life. There are many animals.

Problems: awkward phrasing 'have something different to offer' is acceptable but 'consist of' with views is incorrect; use 'have'. 'Don't have a hustle and bustle' is unidiomatic; use 'without the hustle and bustle'. 'Clear slow life' should be 'calm, slow pace of life'. 'Animals creamed' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely meant 'animals roam' or 'there are many animals'. Corrected to 'There are many animals'.

× I love the view of my country. My country is divided into 3 different parts that is north and the middle and then the South N is full of mountain range. The mill consist of plain areas alongside some beaches and the southern part consists of coastal.

✓ I love the views of my country. My country is divided into three parts: the north, the center, and the south. The north is full of mountain ranges. The middle consists of plain areas and some beaches, and the southern part is coastal.

Several errors: pluralization ('views' preferable), number formatting ('three' spelled out), incorrect clause 'that is north and the middle and then the South N' fixed to list with articles. Subject-verb agreement: 'The mill consist' should be 'The middle consists'. 'Mountain range' pluralized to 'mountain ranges'. 'Consists of coastal' changed to 'is coastal' for grammaticality. Overall sentence structure normalized and verbs agree with subjects.