Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, directly answer the question, and avoid filler words (uh, um). Use correct grammar (e.g., “I am a very photogenic person” → “I like taking photos” or “I am very photogenic” as separate ideas). Keep to 2–3 sentences: a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail. Use more appropriate vocabulary (e.g., track my fitness progress, different kinds of scenery).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, when I go to the gym I often take progress photos to track changes in my muscle definition, and when I travel I capture landscapes to remember the scenery.

Sugestão: Start with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, because, moreover). Reduce repetition and correct grammar (e.g., “have less traffic” not “had a lot of, less traffic”). Provide concrete details or comparisons to strengthen your answer.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they are much calmer and have less traffic than cities. Moreover, rural areas tend to be less polluted since there are fewer cars and less industry, so the air and scenery feel cleaner.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and then add clear, specific supporting reasons. Avoid vague phrases (“different type of taste”) and inaccurate details (sushi is Japanese, not Chinese). Use linking words (for example, for instance) and limit to 2–3 sentences. Mention precise examples and facts to sound natural and credible.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy new experiences and scenery. For instance, last year I visited the Great Wall of China and took many photos, and I also tried a variety of local dishes, which made the trip memorable.

× I am very photogenic person.

✓ I am a very photogenic person.

Missing article 'a' before the noun phrase; this is an article/adjective use error. Add 'a' because 'person' is a singular countable noun and needs an article: 'a very photogenic person'. Suggestion: Always include 'a' or 'the' before singular countable nouns when required.

× I always uh, try to take pictures of different things like uh, whenever I go at gym uh, and I try to flex and uh, I note my progress by the camera and see the how much cuts and how much uh, muscle I increase.

✓ I always try to take pictures of different things whenever I go to the gym. I try to flex and note my progress with the camera to see how much definition and how much muscle I have gained.

Multiple issues: incorrect preposition 'at gym' (use 'to the gym'), awkward phrase 'note my progress by the camera' (use 'with the camera'), and incorrect verb phrase 'muscle I increase' (should be present perfect/verb phrase 'I have gained'). The core grammar types are verb present participle usage and preposition/article errors. Suggestions: use 'to the gym', use 'with the camera', and express change over time with 'have gained' or 'have increased'.

× So yeah I.

✓ So yeah, I do.

Sentence fragment lacking a main verb; this is a sentence structure error. Adding 'do' completes the thought and mirrors spoken emphasis: 'So yeah, I do.' Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a subject and finite verb.

× I prefer rural areas because these areas are quite calm and, uh, had a lot of, uh, less traffic as compared to the urban ones.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are quite calm and have much less traffic compared to urban areas.

Tense and agreement issues: using 'had' with present preference is wrong; also 'a lot of, less traffic' is awkward. This is an incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and verb tense. Use present simple 'are' and 'have', and 'much less traffic' for uncountable noun 'traffic'. Suggestion: say 'they are quite calm and have much less traffic compared to urban areas.'

× Uh, in these areas, uh, the environment is, uh, used to be less polluted because, uh, people don't used to have a lot of cars there and not have a lot of population.

✓ In these areas, the environment tends to be less polluted because people do not usually have many cars and the population is smaller.

Multiple errors: 'used to be' is incorrect for general present tendency ('tends to be' or 'is usually'), and 'don't used to have' is incorrect modal/tense. Also 'not have a lot of population' is unnatural; use 'the population is smaller'. This involves incorrect use of tense/modal and articles. Suggestion: use 'tends to be' or 'is usually' and 'do not usually have' with 'many cars' for countable plural.

× I prefer other countries because I'm a kind of person who used to get bored easily and I want a different type of taste.

✓ I prefer other countries because I am the kind of person who gets bored easily and wants different experiences.

'Used to get bored' implies a past habit; here the speaker means a present tendency, so use simple present 'gets bored'. Also 'I want a different type of taste' is awkward; 'wants different experiences' fits context. This is a present tense issue and word choice problem. Suggestion: use simple present to express regular tendencies: 'who gets bored easily.'

× Like last year I went to China and had a lot of pictures at China Wall and we also enjoyed a lot of cuisines there like the sushi and something like that.

✓ Last year I went to China and took a lot of pictures at the Great Wall of China, and we enjoyed many local dishes there, such as sushi and other foods.

Preposition and article errors: 'had a lot of pictures at China Wall' should be 'took a lot of pictures at the Great Wall of China.' 'Enjoyed a lot of cuisines' is unnatural; use 'enjoyed many local dishes' or 'cuisines.' Also 'the sushi' is too specific; use 'such as sushi.' Suggestion: use 'took pictures' for photography, include correct proper noun 'Great Wall of China', and use 'many' or 'several' with countable items.