Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và mạch lạc: giảm các tiếng ùm/ừ, sửa ngữ pháp số nhiều/đếm (picture → pictures), và rút gọn câu để tránh lặp từ. Thêm một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng liên từ khi đưa chi tiết (for example, so) và cung cấp một ví dụ cụ thể ngắn gọn.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of scenic views when I travel with my family. For example, on recent trips I take several photos of beaches and mountains to post on social media so I can share memories with my friends.

Sugestão: Rút ngắn và sửa lỗi lặp, thì và danh từ (scenery not scenery scenery; landscapes photos → landscape photos; social medias → social media). Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và dùng liên từ (because, so) để giải thích lý do với chi tiết cụ thể về điều khiến phong cảnh nông thôn ‘photogenic’.

Exemplo: I prefer rural scenery because it is more peaceful and often more photogenic. For example, when I visit places like Dianzhang with my family, I take landscape photos of rice fields and rivers to capture calm atmospheres that city photos usually lack.

Sugestão: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng (have a short trip → took a short trip; climbed lakes → hiked around lakes or climbed mountains; be consistent in tense). Bổ sung một câu nói rõ lý do cụ thể (unique features) và dùng liên từ để kết nối ý.

Exemplo: I prefer scenery in other countries because I once took a short trip to China with my family and found the landscapes very beautiful and picturesque. For example, we hiked around mountain lakes and saw terraced fields, which felt very different from urban views.

× I often take picture of scenic views when I travel with my family.

✓ I often take pictures of scenic views when I travel with my family.

Use plural 'pictures' because 'take' typically collocates with the plural form when referring to multiple photos; 'picture' as a countable noun needs plural when not referring to a single item. Suggestion: use 'pictures' or 'a picture' depending on meaning.

× I often umm take a shot of them to post umm on my social platform to share memories with my best friends.

✓ I often take shots of them to post on my social platforms to share memories with my best friends.

Use plural 'shots' to match repeated action; 'social platform' should be plural 'social platforms' or 'social media'. Remove filler 'umm' and unnecessary 'a' before plural. Suggestion: say 'take shots' or 'take a shot' if referring to a single instance and use 'social media' for natural phrasing.

× I prefer rural scenery scenery because it's more peaceful in landscape or more photogenic.

✓ I prefer rural scenery because it's more peaceful and more photogenic in landscape.

Duplicate 'scenery' removed. Use 'peaceful and more photogenic' to connect two adjectives; 'in landscape' is awkward but kept to respect meaning — better: 'for landscapes' or 'in terms of landscapes'. Suggestion: 'I prefer rural scenery because it is more peaceful and photogenic'.

× For example, when I travel with my family to places like Dianzhang, I often take landscapes photos and share them on social medias.

✓ For example, when I travel with my family to places like Dianzhang, I often take landscape photos and share them on social media.

Use 'landscape photos' (adjective 'landscape' + plural noun 'photos') rather than 'landscapes photos'. 'Social media' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Suggestion: use 'share them on social media'.

× These photos remind me a lot.

✓ These photos remind me of those memories a lot.

Add 'of those memories' to clarify what the photos remind the speaker of; original sentence is grammatically possible but incomplete in meaning. Suggestion: specify the object of 'remind' with 'remind me of...'.

× I prefer scenery in other countries because when I have a short trip to China with my family, I found the landscape is very beautiful and picturesque.

✓ I prefer scenery in other countries because when I took a short trip to China with my family, I found the landscape very beautiful and picturesque.

Tense consistency: use past tense 'took' and 'found' to match the completed trip. Remove redundant 'is' after 'landscape' and keep adjective 'very beautiful and picturesque'. Suggestion: maintain past tense when referring to a past trip: 'when I took a short trip... I found...'.

× We have visited a lot of mountains and climbed lakes.

✓ We visited a lot of mountains and climbed at lakes or hiked around lakes.

You 'climb' mountains but do not 'climb lakes'. To express activities with lakes, use 'swam in lakes', 'hiked around lakes', or 'visited lakes'. Also keep tense consistent: 'visited' instead of 'have visited' for simple past narrative. Suggestion: replace 'climbed lakes' with 'hiked around lakes' or 'visited lakes'.

× That's so different from the city views.

✓ That was so different from the city views.

If referring to past experiences, use past tense 'was' to match previous past-tense sentences. If general truth, 'is' could be used. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with surrounding sentences describing past trips.