Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Remove filler words (e.g., “uh”) and avoid repetition (e.g., “keep them photos”). Use linking words to make it coherent.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel I often photograph landscapes and city skylines to remember the places I’ve visited, and I store these photos in albums so I can look back on the memories.

Sugestão: Start with a clear preference sentence, then give two specific reasons linked logically. Use correct tense and smoother linking words (e.g., “because” or “as”). Avoid vague phrases and repetition.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because they are peaceful and full of greenery. For instance, I enjoy photographing rolling hills and quiet villages, as the calm atmosphere and fresh breeze make the scenes more relaxing and photogenic.

Sugestão: Answer directly, then provide one or two specific reasons with proper grammar and linking words. Avoid repetitions like “visit” and unclear phrases such as “giving me so relax.” Use precise vocabulary (e.g., “relaxing” instead of “so relax”).

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because it offers many beautiful natural spots and familiar cultural scenes. For example, I like photographing local forests and coastal areas since they are relaxing, easy to explore, and help me preserve fond memories.

× Yes, I really like to visit so many places, then take some pictures so I can keep them photos to remember those places.

✓ Yes, I really like visiting many places and taking pictures so I can keep them to remember those places.

The learner used infinitive 'to visit' and 'take' alongside a noun phrase awkwardly 'keep them photos'. For preference verbs like 'like' when describing general habits, the -ing form is natural: 'like visiting' and 'taking pictures'. Also 'keep them photos' is incorrect word order; use 'keep them' or 'keep the photos'. Suggest using parallel gerunds and correct noun phrase order.

× So I really enjoy the photos, uh, with the different views.

✓ So I really enjoy the photos with different views.

The phrase 'the different views' is awkward here; removing the article 'the' and filler 'uh' makes the sentence concise. This is an adjective/noun collocation issue: 'photos with different views' is the correct form.

× I prefer to visit rural areas. Those places were very peaceful and a lot of greenery environment, those calm and very good cool breeze.

✓ I prefer visiting rural areas. Those places are very peaceful and have a lot of greenery and a calm, cool breeze.

The student mixed present preference with past tense 'were'; preference requires present tense. Also 'a lot of greenery environment' is ungrammatical: use 'have a lot of greenery' or 'are surrounded by greenery'. Combine ideas with 'and' and correct adjective order 'calm, cool breeze'.

× So I prefer the rural areas to visit and take photos.

✓ So I prefer visiting rural areas and taking photos there.

After 'prefer' use gerund form for habitual actions: 'prefer visiting' and 'taking photos'. Also add 'there' to link to the mentioned places.

× I really like to get view of my own country because there are so many places to visit and full of greenery, environment to visit.

✓ I really like seeing the scenery of my own country because there are so many places to visit that are full of greenery.

'Get view of' is not idiomatic; use 'seeing the scenery' or 'getting a view of'. The clause 'and full of greenery, environment to visit' is ungrammatical: use a relative clause 'that are full of greenery'. This fixes preposition and sentence structure issues.

× I can take lot of photos and keep them as a memory, very peaceful and calm and those places giving me so relax.

✓ I can take a lot of photos and keep them as memories; they are very peaceful and calm and those places make me feel relaxed.

Missing article: 'a lot of photos' required. 'Keep them as a memory' should be plural 'as memories' when referring to many photos. 'Those places giving me so relax' is ungrammatical: use finite verb 'make me feel relaxed'. This corrects article usage and verb form.