Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự từ để câu tự nhiên hơn; tránh lặp từ như “uh” và dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng; thêm chi tiết cụ thể bằng cách nêu ví dụ rõ ràng về một kỷ niệm hoặc cảm xúc khi chụp ảnh. Ngoài ra giữ độ dài ≤ 5 câu và dùng liên từ khi thêm chi tiết.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me preserve memories. For example, I once photographed a sunset at the beach and the colours reminded me of a family holiday. I often revisit those photos to recall how I felt in that moment.

Sugestão: Sử dụng cấu trúc so sánh rõ ràng và ngữ pháp đúng (ví dụ: 'both... and...' với danh từ số nhiều/đúng dạng). Tránh lỗi từ như 'we will can' và dùng liên từ để nối ý (e.g., 'while' hoặc 'whereas'). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về điểm mạnh của mỗi loại cảnh để câu ý nghĩa hơn.

Exemplo: I prefer both urban and rural views because each has its own beauty. Urban areas offer impressive architecture and lively streets, while rural areas provide peaceful landscapes and clear mountain skies. Therefore, I enjoy visiting both depending on my mood.

Sugestão: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (chủ-động, động từ to be), tránh câu rời rạc; dùng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng và 1–2 câu hỗ trợ với lý do cụ thể. Thay những từ mơ hồ như 'compass' bằng từ phù hợp (ví dụ: 'place' hoặc 'atmosphere'). Trình bày mạch lạc bằng liên từ như 'because' và 'so'.

Exemplo: Honestly, I prefer views in my own country because the people here are very friendly and helpful. The atmosphere is peaceful and refreshing, so I feel relaxed when I walk around local parks or villages. This makes local scenery more enjoyable for me.

× I enjoy taking picture of different views because the picture can have me uh, notice my memory about uh, example, the sky.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different views because the pictures help me remember things, for example the sky.

Student used singular 'picture' where plural 'pictures' is required to match 'different views'. Also phrase 'can have me notice my memory about example' is ungrammatical; replace with 'help me remember things, for example...' to convey intended meaning. Suggestion: use plural forms when referring to multiple items and use 'help me remember' for recalling memories.

× I prefer both view in urban area and rural area because each of them have own beautiful.

✓ I prefer both views in urban and rural areas because each of them has its own beauty.

Errors: 'view' should be plural 'views'; 'urban area and rural area' should be plural or use articles; 'have' should be 'has' to agree with 'each'; 'own beautiful' is incorrect collocation — use 'its own beauty'. Suggestion: match singular/plural consistently and use correct collocations (have -> has with each; beauty instead of beautiful).

× For example in urban area we will can see a beautiful city but in rural area we see mountain sky.

✓ For example, in urban areas we can see a beautiful city, but in rural areas we see mountains and the sky.

Incorrect modal sequence 'will can' is ungrammatical—use a single modal 'can'. Also use plurals 'areas' and plural nouns 'mountains' and add conjunction 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: use only one modal verb and ensure noun plurality matches context.

× Honestly I prefer views in my country of course because people in here is very helpful.

✓ Honestly, I prefer views in my country of course because the people here are very helpful.

Problems: 'people in here' is incorrect — use 'the people here'; subject-verb agreement 'people ... is' is wrong, should be 'people ... are'. Suggestion: use 'the' with 'people' when specifying a group and match verb number.

× Atmosphere in here is very peaceful and refreshing.

✓ The atmosphere here is very peaceful and refreshing.

Use 'the atmosphere here' rather than 'Atmosphere in here'; article 'the' is needed. Tense is fine but article and preposition are incorrect. Suggestion: use 'the' with 'atmosphere' and prefer 'here' over 'in here'.

× Live in here, very relaxed compass.

✓ Living here is very relaxing and makes me feel relaxed.

Original is fragmented and contains wrong word 'compass' (likely intended 'comfortable' or 'calm'). 'Live in here' lacks subject; change to gerund phrase 'Living here' or 'Life here is very relaxing.' Suggestion: use complete sentence structure and choose correct vocabulary ('relaxing', 'calm', or 'comfortable').