Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise, correct grammar, and use clearer linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details (when, where, or why). Avoid repetition and use correct verb forms and articles (e.g., “create” → “create” should be “creates” or rephrase). Use linking words like “because,” “for example,” or “so” appropriately.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they create lasting memories. For example, when I visit a new park I always take a few pictures to remember the atmosphere and lighting. These photos cheer me up later and help me recall pleasant moments.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and use precise vocabulary and grammar (e.g., “much better” instead of “very better,” plural/singular agreement). Use one or two specific comparisons or examples and linking words like “because,” “while,” or “whereas.” Keep to 2–3 sentences to avoid redundancy.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they are much cleaner and more peaceful than urban scenes. Whereas cities have noise and vehicle pollution, the countryside offers quiet fields and clear air, which I find more relaxing for photography.

Sugestão: Answer directly and avoid irrelevant details (like being a student unless it explains preference). Use correct grammar (e.g., “my country” not “my countries”) and provide a specific reason or example. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas and keep to 2–3 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer the views in my own country because I can visit them more often and they include mountains, hills and open fields. For example, I often photograph nearby hills at sunset, which gives me beautiful images to remember those moments.

× I like taking pictures of the different views because it create a lasting memories for the future as we can recall our memories in the future to brighten our day and to feel refreshing.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because they create lasting memories for the future, which we can recall to brighten our day and feel refreshed.

Error: subject-verb agreement and noun number with present participle phrase. 'It create' is incorrect because the subject is 'pictures' (plural), so the verb must be 'create'. 'A lasting memories' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'lasting memories' without 'a'. 'To feel refreshing' is incorrect word choice and form; use past participle 'refreshed' to describe how we feel. Also remove 'the' before 'different views' as a general statement. Suggestion: identify the actual subject and ensure verb and article agree, and use appropriate adjective forms.

× Although pictures are the very important part of the life as the people are not camera shy among for example if I went to one place so I would like always to click some pictures for the memories.

✓ Pictures are a very important part of life because many people are not camera-shy; for example, if I go somewhere I always like to take some pictures for memories.

Errors: incorrect use of 'Although' and 'as' together and awkward connectors. 'Although' introduces a contrast but the sentence gives reasons; use 'because'. 'the life' should be 'life' (no article). 'the people' is too general; use 'many people'. 'not camera shy among' is wrong preposition and structure. 'If I went to one place' mixes conditional past; use simple present 'if I go somewhere' for habitual action. 'click some pictures' is informal; 'take some pictures' is standard. Suggestion: choose conjunctions that match the relationship (cause vs contrast) and use consistent tense for habitual actions.

× Honestly speaking, in my opinion the views are very better in the rural areas as it has clean environment and peaceful and calm environment for the refreshing my mind.

✓ Honestly, in my opinion the views are much better in rural areas because they have a clean, peaceful environment that refreshes my mind.

Errors: 'very better' is ungrammatical; use 'much better' or 'far better'. 'the rural areas' can be 'rural areas' in general. 'as it has' mismatches number: 'rural areas' (plural) requires 'they have'. Repetition 'peaceful and calm environment' is redundant; combine adjectives in correct order and remove 'the' before 'refreshing my mind' and change to relative clause 'that refreshes my mind'. Suggestion: use correct comparative collocations and match verb number to the subject; reduce redundancy.

× Although urban areas has a lot of hustle and bustle of the vehicles and the bikes which sometimes creates the pollution.

✓ Urban areas have a lot of hustle and bustle from vehicles and bikes, which sometimes creates pollution.

Errors: 'Although' is unnecessary here; it begins a dependent clause without main clause. 'urban areas has' is wrong: plural subject needs 'have'. 'hustle and bustle of the vehicles and the bikes' should be 'hustle and bustle from vehicles and bikes'. 'which sometimes creates the pollution' should be 'which sometimes creates pollution' (no article). Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and proper prepositions; avoid starting sentences with subordinating conjunctions unless followed by the main clause.

× So I prefer taking pictures in the rural areas as compared to urban areas.

✓ So I prefer taking pictures in rural areas compared to urban areas.

Redundancy: 'as compared to' is wordy; 'compared to' or 'rather than' is clearer. Also remove 'the' before 'rural areas' and 'urban areas' when speaking generally. Suggestion: simplify comparative phrases and drop unnecessary articles for general statements.

× As I'm a student and I have no time to visit other countries so I only see the views in my country.

✓ Because I'm a student and I have no time to visit other countries, I only see views in my country.

Errors: starting with 'As' plus 'so' creates redundant connectors; use 'because' and a comma to join clauses. 'see the views' is awkward; 'see views' or 'see the sights' is better. Suggestion: use a single subordinating conjunction to introduce the reason and correct noun phrase for clarity.

× So I love and prefer the views of my own countries as it has mountains, hills, fields to take pictures and to capture the view and to recall the memories in the future.

✓ So I love and prefer the views of my own country because it has mountains, hills, and fields to photograph and to help me recall memories in the future.

Errors: 'my own countries' should be singular 'my own country' when referring to the student's nation. 'as it has' refers to 'country' (singular) so correct. 'to take pictures and to capture the view and to recall the memories' is repetitive and awkward; combine into clearer purpose phrases like 'to photograph' and 'to help me recall memories'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun/possessive and noun number match and avoid repetitive infinitive phrases.