Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 다소 길고 반복이 있으며 문법적 연결이나 정확성이 떨어집니다. 우선 토픽 문장으로 명확히 시작한 뒤, supporting detail을 2문장 이내로 간결하게 제시하세요. 예를 들어 ‘landscapes, urban scenery, and people’를 나열할 때 중복을 피하고, ‘secret hobby’와 같은 표현은 구체적으로 왜 그런 사진을 좋아하는지(예: mood, composition)로 설명하면 좋습니다. 또한 ‘If I can see one… it’s a bit.’처럼 불완전한 문장은 명확히 끝맺으세요. 연결어(for example, especially, because)를 사용해 문장 흐름을 개선하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing a variety of scenes, such as landscapes, urban scenery, and candid portraits. For example, I love capturing aesthetically pleasing compositions when I spot interesting light or symmetry while walking or sitting in a café, because those moments convey a particular mood.

Sugestão: 문법 오류와 중복 표현이 눈에 띕니다(예: 'a bit advocate', 'a kind of a sentimental kind of idea', 중복된 'for for instance'). 답변은 주제 문장→이유→예시 순으로 간결하게 구성하세요. ‘prefer’ 질문에는 분명히 선호를 밝히고, 이유를 구체적으로 제시(예: lighting, architecture, nightlife)하세요. 또한 예시는 한두 개 도시로 좁혀 자연스럽게 연결어(e.g., especially, because)를 사용하면 더 논리적입니다.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views, especially at night, because city lights and architecture create dramatic contrasts and lively scenes. For instance, cities like New York and Paris have iconic skylines and vibrant nightlife that make photographing streets and buildings very exciting.

Sugestão: 의견은 분명하지만 표현이 어색하고 반복이 있습니다('experience' 반복, 'open your minds', 'feel tedious'). 보다 자연스럽게 이유(새로운 문화, 다른 풍경, 다양한 light/architecture)를 구체적으로 제시하고, 한두 문장으로 간결하게 마무리하세요. 연결어(such as, because, moreover)를 사용해 논리를 강화하고 불필요한 수식어를 줄이세요.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new cultural contexts and different landscapes that inspire my photography. For example, exploring unfamiliar streets or rural scenes abroad often gives me fresh ideas and a new perspective when I feel stuck.

× I actually enjoy taking pictures of different kinds of landscapes, urban scenery, or nature overall, and I also like taking pictures of people as well.

✓ I actually enjoy taking pictures of different kinds of landscapes, urban scenery, or nature overall, and I also like taking pictures of people.

'Taking' is used correctly, but 'as well' is redundant after 'also'. Remove redundancy to improve clarity. Suggestion: use either 'also' or 'as well', not both.

× I have a secret hobby of taking a majestic or aesthetic picture.

✓ I have a secret hobby of taking majestic or aesthetic pictures.

Plural form 'pictures' fits better with 'a hobby of taking' because the activity implies repeated actions. Also remove the article 'a' before 'majestic' which made it awkward. Use plural noun for general habits.

× If I can see one when I'm walking by or just having a meal or just at the cafe, it's a bit.

✓ If I see one when I'm walking by, having a meal, or at a cafe, it makes me happy.

The original sentence is incomplete and vague ('it's a bit'). Replace with a complete clause that expresses the intended reaction. Use parallel gerunds 'walking by, having a meal, or at a cafe' (better: 'at a cafe') for clarity.

× Not a lot of people will agree with me, but I am actually a bit advocate of taking pictures of urban areas.

✓ Not a lot of people will agree with me, but I am actually a bit of an advocate of taking pictures of urban areas.

Missing article phrase 'a bit of an advocate' is required. Add 'of an' to form the correct expression. Also using 'will agree' for general opinion is acceptable but 'agree' or 'would agree' could be more natural.

× I also, I especially like urban areas when in the night time with the night scenery and the nightlife of urban areas, the big cities for for instance New York and Paris.

✓ I especially like urban areas at night because of the night scenery and nightlife in big cities, for instance New York and Paris.

Fix repetition and word order. Use 'at night' rather than 'in the night time'. Remove duplicated 'for'. Use 'nightlife in big cities' for natural phrasing. Subject-verb agreement unchanged.

× I always have a kind of a sentimental kind of idea about those kind of places.

✓ I always have a kind of sentimental idea about those kinds of places.

Reduce repetitive 'kind of' usage. Use 'kinds' to match plural 'places'. The original is wordy and redundant; streamline for natural English.

× These days, I think I prefer views in other countries.

✓ These days, I think I prefer views in other countries.

This sentence is grammatically correct; present tense 'think' and 'prefer' match the context. No change needed.

× I really enjoy experiencing urban areas, rural spaces, getting the new kind of experience of living in a totally different space in other countries.

✓ I really enjoy experiencing urban areas and rural spaces, getting the new experience of living in a totally different place in another country.

Use parallel structure 'urban areas and rural spaces'. Change 'new kind of experience' to 'new experience' for concision. Use 'place' and 'another country' (singular) or 'other countries' (plural) consistently.

× The experience and the practices inside them itself is very refreshing and it can kind of open your minds when you feel tedious.

✓ The experiences and practices there are very refreshing, and they can open your mind when you feel bored.

Use plural 'experiences' and plural verb 'are' to agree. Replace awkward 'inside them itself' with 'there'. 'Open your minds' should be 'open your mind' for general advice; 'feel tedious' is incorrect—use 'feel bored'.