Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be direct and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence saying whether you like taking pictures, then give two concise supporting reasons with linking words. Avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases (e.g. “His other technicians”) and reduce repetition. Use specific vocabulary (e.g. “landscapes,” “close-ups,” “wide shots”) and correct small grammar errors (e.g. “it looks good” → “they look good”). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like photographing flowers and mountains because flowers have vivid colors and mountains give dramatic shapes. Also, clouds and sky often look impressive even with a phone camera, so I often take wide shots to capture the whole scene.

Sugestão: Answer plainly and avoid odd or irrelevant words (e.g. “police” and “used in rural areas”). Start with a direct statement of preference, then give two specific reasons with linking words like “because” and “whereas.” Check word choice and grammar: use “surroundings” not “surround,” and say “I prefer rural areas” rather than repeating. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because the surroundings are greener and the air feels fresher, so scenes look more peaceful. In contrast, urban views often have many concrete buildings and traffic, which makes them less attractive to photograph.

Sugestão: Clarify the meaning and avoid confusing phrases (e.g. “using my country computers in countries,” “Nippon”). Begin with a clear preference, then give specific reasons and an example. Use correct country name if relevant and avoid contradictions. Keep responses natural and grammatical, 2–3 sentences max.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because it has many natural landscapes and abundant greenery. For example, when I travel by car at home I often see wide fields and forests that are peaceful and perfect for photography.

× His other technicians have different views.

✓ My other acquaintances have different views.

The pronoun 'His' is incorrect because the speaker refers to themselves. Use 'my' for first-person possession. Also 'technicians' doesn't fit context; 'acquaintances' or 'friends' is clearer. Suggestion: use first-person possessive 'my' when speaking about your own contacts and choose a noun that fits the context.

× Mostly I love to take pictures of flowers and mountains because flowers are very colorful and if you take pictures of clouds and it looks good even with a superphone camera.

✓ I mostly love to take pictures of flowers and mountains because flowers are colorful, and pictures of clouds also look good even with a smartphone camera.

Sentence was long and awkward. 'Mostly' should come before the verb for clarity. 'if you take pictures of clouds and it looks good' is unclear and uses incorrect conditional structure. Replace 'superphone' with 'smartphone'. Suggestion: split complex ideas with a conjunction and keep consistent subject reference.

× So I love taking it just to satisfy myself that I have got good.

✓ So I love taking them just to satisfy myself that they turned out well.

Pronoun 'it' doesn't agree with plural 'pictures'; use 'them'. 'I have got good' is ungrammatical; use 'they turned out well' or 'I took good photos'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number and use a clear verb phrase for the result.

× I usually prefer views in rural areas because the environment is clean, the surround is green and I can see far away from a place in rural areas.

✓ I usually prefer views in rural areas because the environment is clean, the surroundings are green, and I can see far away from places in the countryside.

Use plural 'surroundings' instead of 'surround' and maintain present tense 'are'. 'In rural areas' repeated is redundant; 'the countryside' is more natural. Suggestion: correct nouns to plural when needed and avoid repetition.

× However, in case of urban areas it is full of concrete buildings and police and everywhere, so I prefer used in rural areas.

✓ However, urban areas are full of concrete buildings and busy streets, so I prefer rural areas.

'In case of urban areas' is awkward; say 'urban areas'. 'It is full' should agree with plural 'areas' so use 'are full'. 'Police and everywhere' is unclear; likely meant 'traffic' or 'crowds'. 'I prefer used in rural areas' is ungrammatical; use 'I prefer rural areas.' Suggestion: match subject-verb number and choose appropriate nouns for clarity.

× I prefer using my country computers in countries because Nippon is very famous for natural resources and I'm the one who loves nature alone.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because Japan is famous for its natural scenery and I love nature.

The original sentence contains unrelated and incorrect nouns ('computers', 'in countries'). Replace with 'views in my own country'. Use 'Japan' instead of 'Nippon' for clarity in English and 'natural scenery' instead of 'natural resources' which has a different meaning. 'I'm the one who loves nature alone' is awkward; 'I love nature' is natural. Suggestion: ensure vocabulary fits meaning and remove extraneous words.

× I always want to be around nature and greenery, and whenever I look at the views in the car, it's very green and natural.

✓ I always want to be surrounded by nature and greenery, and whenever I look at the scenery from the car, it looks very green and natural.

Use 'surrounded by' instead of 'be around' for a natural expression. 'Views in the car' is better as 'scenery from the car'. Match subject 'scenery' with singular pronoun 'it' and use 'looks' to describe appearance. Suggestion: choose idiomatic prepositional phrases and consistent subject references.