Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct minor grammar and word choice errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, use linking words for additional details, avoid repetition (e.g., 'take' and 'capture'), and correct product name if needed. Also keep within 3–4 sentences. Provide one or two specific examples of recent photos and why you liked them.

Exemplo: Yes — I enjoy photographing a variety of scenes, such as landscapes, portraits and wildlife. Recently I bought a Fujifilm camera, and I used it to capture misty river landscapes near my hometown and candid family moments during a holiday in Vietnam. I liked the river photos because of the soft morning light and the candid shots because they showed real emotions.

Sugestão: Improve grammatical accuracy and cohesion. Begin with a clear preference or balanced view, then use linking words (for example, however, on the other hand) and correct phrases (e.g., 'the convenience and energy of the city', 'slow pace of life'). Avoid sentence fragments. Add one specific sensory detail to make it vivid.

Exemplo: I enjoy both, but for different reasons. For example, I like the convenience and energy of Ho Chi Minh City, where I live, because there are many cafes and busy streets full of life. However, I also love the peaceful scenery and slow pace of my hometown in the Mekong Delta, especially the quiet canals and green rice fields.

Sugestão: Make tense and word choices consistent and avoid filler words like 'Umm.' Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, because / also). Avoid repeating 'especially' multiple times. Mention one concrete example (a place, sight, or dish) to add specificity.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I haven't had a chance to travel abroad yet. I feel especially attached to the Mekong Delta because of its scenic rivers and welcoming local communities. For example, I love watching the floating markets at dawn and tasting fresh seafood and rice noodle dishes there.

× Yes, I do really enjoy taking photos of different views, especially scenery, portraits and wildlife.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of different views, especially scenery, portraits, and wildlife.

Remove the extra auxiliary 'do' before 'really enjoy' because 'do' is unnecessary in positive statements. Also add a comma before 'and' in the list for clarity (serial comma). Suggestion: use 'I really enjoy' for a natural present simple statement about a habitual preference.

× I recently bought a Fujitsu camera and I've been using it to take and capture landscapes around my hometown and family moments on a holiday in Vietnam, which is that holiday.

✓ I recently bought a Fujitsu camera and I've been using it to capture landscapes around my hometown and family moments on a holiday in Vietnam.

Redundant verbs: 'to take and capture' is repetitive; choose one verb. The clause 'which is that holiday' is ungrammatical and unnecessary. Use present perfect continuous 'I've been using' correctly to describe recent ongoing activity. Suggestion: simplify to 'using it to capture' and remove the unclear clause.

× I like both urban and rural areas because it offers different kinds of beauty.

✓ I like both urban and rural areas because they offer different kinds of beauty.

Subject-verb agreement: 'areas' is plural, so the pronoun must be plural 'they' and the verb 'offer' should be plural form. Using 'it offers' incorrectly treats 'urban and rural areas' as singular. Suggestion: match plural subject with plural pronoun and verb.

× So, for example, I enjoy the convenient and energetic of the people in Ho Chi Minh City, where I live now.

✓ For example, I enjoy the convenience and energy of the people in Ho Chi Minh City, where I live now.

Wrong word forms: 'convenient' and 'energetic' are adjectives, but nouns 'convenience' and 'energy' are needed after 'enjoy'. Use the noun forms to correctly express what is enjoyed. Also remove the redundant 'So,' at the start. Suggestion: use noun forms after 'enjoy'.

× But I also love the peaceful scenery of my hometown, the Mekong Delta.

✓ But I also love the peaceful scenery of my hometown, the Mekong Delta.

This sentence is already grammatically correct. No change needed. Explanation: 'peaceful' correctly modifies 'scenery' and the noun phrase is clear. (Included to confirm correctness.)

× Especially, I love the low living pace.

✓ In particular, I love the slow pace of life.

Word choice and word order: 'low living pace' is unnatural in English. Use the idiomatic noun phrase 'the slow pace of life' or 'a slower pace of life'. Replace 'Especially,' with 'In particular,' or omit it. Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'pace of life'.

× Umm, actually, I haven't had the time to travel abroad, so I especially preferred the views in my own country, Vietnam.

✓ Actually, I haven't had the time to travel abroad, so I especially prefer the views in my own country, Vietnam.

Tense inconsistency: 'haven't had' (present perfect) expresses a current state, so follow with present simple 'prefer' to express current preference. 'Preferred' is past and conflicts with the ongoing situation. Suggestion: use 'prefer' to match the timeframe.

× I'm very attached to my hometown and I especially love the Mekong Delta because it is so beautiful with scenic rivers and friendly local community, especially the local food too.

✓ I'm very attached to my hometown, and I especially love the Mekong Delta because it is so beautiful, with scenic rivers, friendly local communities, and local food.

Plural and article use: 'friendly local community' should be 'friendly local communities' or 'the friendly local community' depending on meaning; here plural fits better. Remove redundant 'especially' and 'too'. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: use consistent number and avoid repeating 'especially'.