Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetitions and filler sounds, correct word choice (e.g., “soak up the moment” not “suck up”), and keep it concise (1–3 sentences). Add one brief reason or example using a linking word. Pronunciation and fluency will improve if you reduce hesitations.

Exemplo: Not really. I prefer to soak up the moment rather than take photos because I find it more relaxing and memorable. For example, when I visit a beach I like to watch the sunset instead of photographing it.

Sugestão: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details. Avoid repetition and correct errors (e.g., “prefer the city” / “prefer the countryside”). Use linking words (e.g., “however,” “on the other hand”) and give one specific example to illustrate each preference. Reduce fillers like “umm” and repeated phrases to improve fluency.

Exemplo: It depends on my mood. If I need energy, I prefer the city because the busy streets and cafes make me feel motivated; for example, I enjoy walking through markets. On the other hand, if I want to relax I choose the countryside because the quiet scenery helps me unwind.

Sugestão: Start with a clear, confident topic sentence. Eliminate excessive fillers and correct grammar (e.g., “traveling to other countries makes me feel refreshed and broadens my horizons”). Provide one specific reason or short example to support your opinion, using a linking word like “because” or “for example.”

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because traveling abroad refreshes me and broadens my horizons. For example, visiting Japan last year exposed me to different landscapes and inspired new ideas for my photography.

× Honestly I'm not very into the taking photos, I prefer to stay there and suck, suck up the moment and I just enjoy the experience rather than photographing.

✓ Honestly, I'm not very into taking photos; I prefer to stay there and soak up the moment, and I just enjoy the experience rather than photographing.

Problems: incorrect use of 'the taking photos' (unnecessary definite article and wrong form) and wrong verb 'suck' instead of 'soak'. Use gerund 'taking' without 'the' after 'into'. 'Suck up the moment' is incorrect collocation; correct phrase is 'soak up the moment'. Also add commas and a semicolon for clarity. Suggestion: remove 'the' before gerund, replace 'suck' with 'soak', and revise punctuation for fluent English.

× Well, it depends on my mood. Umm, when I want to get energy, I prefer to city because it's the bustling. Umm moods make me feel energized and motivated.

✓ Well, it depends on my mood. When I want to get energy, I prefer the city because it's bustling. The mood makes me feel energized and motivated.

Problems: missing definite article before 'city' (use 'the city' when speaking generally about urban areas), unnecessary 'the' before 'bustling' and awkward noun phrase 'it's the bustling' (use adjective 'bustling'). 'Umm moods' is ungrammatical; use 'The mood' or 'That mood'. Suggestion: add 'the' before 'city', remove 'the' before 'bustling', and use a clear subject 'The mood' to refer to the emotional state.

× On the other hand, sometime I want to get I want to relax and then I go to the city.

✓ On the other hand, sometimes I want to relax, so I go to the countryside.

Problems: 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'; sentence is disfluent and contradicts earlier preference for city when energized. Context suggests going to countryside to relax, so correct to 'countryside'. Also remove repeated 'I want to'. Suggestion: use 'sometimes', connect ideas with 'so', and ensure consistency with intended meaning.

× I I go to the countryside and it make me feel calm.

✓ I go to the countryside and it makes me feel calm.

Problem: subject-verb agreement — 'it' (singular) requires 'makes' (third person singular). Also remove duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: use 'makes' with singular subject and avoid repeated words.

× Well, I definitely umm prefer other countries, umm traveling other countries made me feel refreshed and umm broaden my horizons and umm it is inspired me a lot. So I just like umm this kind of experience very much.

✓ Well, I definitely prefer other countries. Traveling to other countries has made me feel refreshed and has broadened my horizons, and it has inspired me a lot. So I really like this kind of experience.

Problems: missing preposition 'to' after 'traveling'; inconsistent tenses — use present perfect 'has made/has broadened/has inspired' to describe past experiences with present relevance. 'It is inspired me' is incorrect passive/form; correct is 'it has inspired me'. Also 'umm' fillers removed and 'really' is a more natural adverb. Suggestion: use 'traveling to other countries', apply present perfect for life experiences that affect the present, and correct verb forms to active voice.