Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (e.g., uh) and unclear references (UH). Mention the kind of views you like and why briefly.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different landscapes. For example, when I go hiking I often stop to photograph mountain ridges and streams with the DSLR I bought at university because I like capturing natural light and textures.

Sugestão: Improve grammar and clarity. Use a clear comparison structure (prefer X to Y). Remove hesitations and explain one concrete reason with a linking phrase (because/so). Specify what you find appealing in urban views (architecture, lights, activity).

Exemplo: I prefer urban views to rural ones because I find the architecture and city lights more stimulating. For instance, I enjoy watching the contrast of modern skyscrapers and busy streets when I commute for work.

Sugestão: Clarify your meaning and avoid ambiguous terms. State your preference clearly, give a specific reason, and provide an example of what differs abroad (landscapes, culture, architecture). Remove unclear references like 'artisan of the Uks.'

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they feel more novel and diverse. For example, I find coastal towns in Spain more colorful and varied than the familiar cityscapes I see daily in Japan, so traveling offers fresh photographic subjects.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different sceneries.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different scenery.

The noun 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Use 'scenery' to refer generally to different kinds of views. Suggestion: say 'different scenery' or 'different scenes'.

× For example, when I go hiking, I take many pictures with my UH camera which I bought when I was a university student.

✓ For example, when I go hiking, I take many pictures with my UH camera, which I bought when I was a university student.

The sentence mainly needs a comma before the non-restrictive clause 'which I bought...' rather than a verb form change. Adding the comma clarifies the clause is additional information. Also ensure 'UH' is intended branding; otherwise use correct name. Suggestion: add comma and keep past tense 'bought' for completed action in the past.

× I think I prefer urban areas than rural areas because I I usually go to uh other areas every day for my work and I everyday amazed by the view of UH.

✓ I think I prefer urban areas to rural areas because I usually go to other areas every day for work and I am amazed by the view there every day.

Use 'prefer X to Y' not 'prefer X than Y' (preposition error). Remove duplicated 'I' and filler 'uh'. 'Go to other areas for my work' is fine; 'everyday' is an adjective meaning 'ordinary' so use 'every day' for the adverbial phrase. Also 'amazed' requires a be-verb: 'I am amazed'. 'of UH' is unclear; replace with 'there' or the place name. Suggestions: use 'prefer ... to ...', 'every day' for frequency, and include the correct form of 'be' with 'amazed'.

× I prefer views of other countries to my own country.

✓ I prefer the views of other countries to those of my own country.

When comparing 'views' from different countries, use 'the views of other countries' and refer back with 'those of my own country' to avoid repeating 'views'. This also clarifies the comparison. Suggestion: use 'those of' to refer back to a previously mentioned plural noun.

× I see views of Japan every day and I it's, I think I feel it's boring to me and the artisan of the Uks, I mean.

✓ I see views of Japan every day, and I think they are boring to me; I mean, the scenery feels too familiar.

The original sentence has broken structure, filler words 'it's, I think I feel', and unclear phrase 'the artisan of the Uks' which seems incorrect or garbled. Fix by simplifying: 'I think they are boring to me' (agreeing number with 'views' -> 'they'). Replace unclear phrase with a clearer idea such as 'the scenery feels too familiar'. Suggestions: remove fillers, match pronouns to plural nouns ('they' for 'views'), and replace unclear vocabulary with an intended meaning.