Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more grammatically correct, concise and finish your thought. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and correct verb forms (take/taking).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. When I travel, I usually focus on landscapes such as mountains and coastal scenes because they capture the atmosphere of a place. For example, last year I photographed the seaside at sunrise, which showed vivid colors and calm water.

Sugestão: Reduce repetition and vary vocabulary. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then expand with one or two linked, specific reasons or an example. Use linking words (because, for example, therefore) and avoid repeating phrases.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside is more tranquil and visually appealing. For example, I enjoy hiking in the mountains and walking on quiet beaches, which help me relax and enjoy fresh air away from the noise of the city.

Sugestão: This answer does not address the question about own country versus other countries. First answer the question directly (own country, other countries, or both), then support your choice with specific reasons or an example. Keep it concise and relevant.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because I like seeing landscapes that are different from those at home. For example, when I visited New Zealand, the dramatic mountain scenery and unique coastlines offered sights I cannot find in my own country, which made the trip memorable.

× Yeah, I like to taking picture when I, uh, go to travel umm uh, the few I like to take is scenery.

✓ Yeah, I like to take pictures when I travel; the ones I like to take are of scenery.

Incorrect use of 'to' with a gerund: after 'like' you can use 'to' + base verb or verb+ -ing but not 'to taking'. Also 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match general activity. 'Go to travel' is incorrect; use 'travel' or 'go traveling'. 'The few I like to take is scenery' has subject-number and word choice errors; correct to 'the ones I like to take are of scenery.' Suggestions: use 'like to take' or 'like taking', use plural for general countable nouns, and ensure subject-verb agreement ('ones... are').

× Most of the time I taking picture when I was traveling around the town, the village.

✓ Most of the time I take pictures when I travel around towns and villages.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'I taking' is missing the auxiliary or base form; it should be 'I take' or 'I'm taking' depending on meaning. 'When I was traveling' mixes past with present 'Most of the time' which requires present simple habitual 'I take' or present continuous habit 'I am taking'. Also 'the town, the village' is awkward—use plural 'towns and villages' for general habits. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (present simple for habitual actions) and use plural form for general places.

× I like the.

✓ I like that.

Incomplete sentence and wrong demonstrative: 'I like the.' is a sentence fragment lacking an object; 'the' needs a noun following it. Likely the student meant 'I like that' or 'I like it.' Suggestion: complete the thought by using an appropriate pronoun or noun, e.g. 'I like that' or 'I like scenery.'

× I prefer views in rural areas because I because I find the countryside more tranquil and scenic.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I find the countryside more tranquil and scenic.

Repeated phrase 'because I' is redundant and creates a sentence structure error. Remove the duplicate to make a clear sentence. Suggestion: say the reason once and ensure no repetitions.

× For example, I enjoy mountains, beaches and forests because they feel peaceful and allow me to relax away from the busy city.

✓ For example, I enjoy mountains, beaches, and forests because they feel peaceful and allow me to relax away from the busy city.

This sentence is mostly correct grammatically; adjustment added is serial comma which is stylistic. However 'the busy city' is acceptable but you could say 'the busy city life' or 'the busy city' depending on meaning. No grammatical error from the provided list; suggestion: keep parallel nouns and consider adding commas for clarity.

× I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside is more tranquil and scenic, which helps me unwind.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside is more tranquil and scenic, and this helps me unwind.

Original is grammatically acceptable, but 'which' clause is fine; changed to 'and this' only to vary structure. There is no clear error from the provided list; suggestion: either form is correct. Maintain clear clause linkage.

× For instance, I often go hiking in the mountains or walk along the beach, where the fresh air and natural sounds make it much easier to relax away from the busy city.

✓ For instance, I often go hiking in the mountains or walk along the beach, where the fresh air and natural sounds make it much easier to relax away from the busy city.

This sentence is correct; 'go hiking' correctly uses verb + -ing after 'go'. No changes required. Suggestion: keep verb forms consistent and appropriate; here 'go hiking' and 'walk' are parallel enough.