Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: 문장이 반복적이고 장황합니다. 질문에 대한 주제 문장을 먼저 간결히 말한 뒤, 한두 개의 구체적 이유나 예시를 연결어(예: because, so, for example)를 사용해 덧붙이세요. 동일한 의미의 표현(‘love’ 등)을 반복하지 말고 다양한 어휘를 사용하세요.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because photography is my favorite hobby. For example, I often photograph sunsets and cityscapes to preserve special moments and experiment with light and composition.

Sugestão: 문장이 길고 중복 표현(‘because’, ‘really’, ‘comfortable and relaxed’)이 있습니다. 주제 문장을 간결히 말하고 연결어(eg. because, as, so)를 하나만 사용해 구체적 이유나 사례를 추가하세요. 문법적 오류(‘makes me to feel’ → ‘makes me feel’)를 고치세요.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I live in the countryside and enjoy the peaceful scenery. For instance, quiet fields and rolling hills help me unwind after a busy week.

Sugestão: 답변이 모호하고 반복적입니다(‘depends… but’, ‘comfortable and relaxed’). 먼저 분명한 주제를 제시한 뒤 이유를 구체화하고, 비교 예시(자국과 해외의 차이)를 하나 덧붙여 응답을 풍부하게 만드세요.

Exemplo: Generally, I prefer views in my own country because I know the culture and landscapes better. However, I also enjoy visiting other countries for different scenery, such as alpine mountains or tropical beaches, which offer new perspectives.

× Yes, I really love taking pictures of different views because that is one of my favorite hobbies in my life because I really love to capture and record those precious moments on my camera.

✓ Yes, I really love taking pictures of different views because it is one of my favorite hobbies and I enjoy capturing those precious moments with my camera.

The original sentence is repetitive and wordy ('because' repeated, 'in my life' unnecessary). Also 'record those precious moments on my camera' is awkward; use 'with my camera'. Combine ideas for clarity and reduce repetition. Suggestion: Remove redundant phrases, avoid repeating conjunctions, and use natural collocations like 'capturing moments with my camera'.

× Well, I prefer to see rural areas since I'm living in the countryside because it looks really beautiful and peaceful and it makes me to feel more comfortable and relaxed.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas since I live in the countryside because they look really beautiful and peaceful and they make me feel more comfortable and relaxed.

Issues: 'prefer to see rural areas' is unnatural; use 'prefer rural areas'. 'I'm living' is acceptable but 'I live' is simpler. Subject-verb agreement: 'it looks' should be 'they look' referring to 'rural areas'. 'makes me to feel' is incorrect; after 'make' use the bare infinitive 'feel'. Suggestion: Use correct agreement for plural subjects, avoid unnecessary 'to' after causative verbs, and choose natural verbs ('prefer rural areas').

× Well I think it depends on what country it is, but I prefer to view in my country because it helps me to feel more comfortable and relaxed.

✓ Well, I think it depends on the country, but I prefer to see views in my country because it helps me feel more comfortable and relaxed.

Problems: 'depends on what country it is' is wordy — 'depends on the country' is concise. 'Prefer to view in my country' is unnatural; use 'prefer to see views in my country' or 'prefer views in my country'. 'Helps me to feel' — 'helps me feel' is more natural. Suggestion: Use concise phrasing, correct verb collocations ('see views' or 'prefer views'), and omit unnecessary 'to' after 'help'.