Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Improve grammar and sentence structure to sound natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and avoid fragments. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., 'but', 'because', 'for example'). Add one specific detail about what makes selfies personal.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different landscapes because I like capturing dramatic scenery, but I prefer taking selfies because they feel more personal. For example, a selfie with friends helps me remember who I was with and how I felt at that moment.

Sugestão: This answer is good but can be slightly improved by tightening phrasing and adding a brief linking word to show contrast with urban areas. Correct minor articles ('a field') and use plural/singular consistently. Add one specific sensory detail to strengthen imagery.

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because the open landscape and greenery help me relax and breathe fresh air. For example, walking by a field and gentle hills clears my mind more than crowded city streets, and the quiet lets me notice small details like the song of birds and glowing sunsets.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitation and correct awkward phrasing. Begin with a clear topic sentence and give specific reasons with linking words ('because', 'for example'). Avoid filler words ('umm') and broken fragments; use concise adjectives and correct word forms (e.g., 'exciting' not 'ex it in'). Provide one concrete example of a memorable view abroad.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they offer landscapes and cultures I haven't seen before. For example, the cherry blossoms in Japan or the historic streets of the UK feel more exciting and memorable than places I've already visited at home.

× Yes, I do enjoying photography different landscapes because I like capturing dramatic sceneries.

✓ Yes, I enjoy photographing different landscapes because I like capturing dramatic scenery.

The original uses 'do enjoying' which is incorrect: after auxiliary 'do' the base form 'enjoy' should be used (Verb + -ing form error). Also 'photography' should be the verb 'photograph' in gerund form 'photographing' to match the sentence meaning. 'Sceneries' is nonstandard; use the uncountable noun 'scenery'. Suggested improvement: use 'I enjoy photographing...' and 'scenery'.

× However, I prefer taking selfies. Things that they feel more personal and expressive.

✓ However, I prefer taking selfies because they feel more personal and expressive.

The second fragment 'Things that they feel more personal and expressive.' is a sentence structure error (incomplete clause). It should be combined with the previous sentence and use a clear subject and verb: 'they feel'. Suggested improvement: join to form 'I prefer taking selfies because they feel more personal and expressive.'

× For example, I can remember who I was with and how I feel in that moment.

✓ For example, I can remember who I was with and how I felt in that moment.

The sentence mixes past and present: 'I can remember' (present ability) refers to a past moment, so the clause should use past tense 'felt' (Past tense issue). Suggested improvement: keep time reference consistent by using 'felt' for the past moment.

× I prefer views in rural areas because the open landscapes and the greenery help me relax and breathe fresh air.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because open landscapes and greenery help me relax and breathe fresh air.

Using definite article 'the' before general nouns like 'open landscapes' and 'greenery' is unnecessary here (article errors). Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural when speaking generally. Suggested improvement: omit 'the' for general statements.

× For example, walking by field and hills clears my mind more than crowded city streets, and the quiet environment allows me to notice natural details like birds and sunsets.

✓ For example, walking among fields and hills clears my mind more than crowded city streets, and the quiet environment allows me to notice natural details like birds and sunsets.

'Walking by field and hills' has incorrect preposition and pluralization: use 'among' or 'through' for being surrounded by terrain, and plural 'fields' (Incorrect use of prepositions and Singular and plural issue). Suggested improvement: 'walking among fields and hills'.

× I'm a big fan of traveling so umm. I prefer views in different countries like in Japan or in Europe or in the UK case.

✓ I'm a big fan of traveling, so I prefer views in different countries, for example Japan, other parts of Europe, or the UK.

The original has choppy fragments and awkward phrasing ('in the UK case')—a sentence structure error. It should be smoothed and use proper prepositions: 'in Japan' is fine, but list items should be parallel and 'the UK' requires 'the'. Suggested improvement: combine into one fluent sentence and use parallel structure.

× Those views are those I haven't seen before.

✓ Those views are ones I haven't seen before.

Repeating 'those' is awkward and nonstandard; use 'ones' as a pronoun referring back to 'views' (Incorrect use of pronouns). Suggested improvement: use 'ones I haven't seen before' or 'that I haven't seen before.'

× It's like more ex it in. It's like more impressive.

✓ They are more exciting. They are more impressive.

The phrase 'It's like more ex it in' is ungrammatical and appears to attempt 'more exciting' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs and sentence structure errors). Also subject agreement: refer to 'views' (plural), so use 'They are'. Suggested improvement: use clear adjectives 'exciting' and 'impressive' with correct subject-verb agreement.