Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Ваш ответ нечёткий и несвязный. Необходимо: 1) прямо ответить на вопрос в первом предложении (Yes/No + краткое объяснение); 2) использовать логичные поддерживающие детали, избегая бессмысочных словосочетаний; 3) ограничиться максимум 3–4 предложениями; 4) применять слова, относящиеся к фотографированию (e.g. scenery, colors, composition).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I especially like colorful scenes because vibrant colors make photos more lively. For example, I often photograph markets and festivals where there are interesting patterns and bright costumes.

Sugestão: Ответ практически не отвечает на вопрос и содержит несвязные фразы. Рекомендации: 1) Начните с чёткой позиции (urban or rural); 2) Добавьте 1–2 конкретные причины, используя связки (because, so, therefore); 3) Приведите пример опыта или сравнение; 4) Избегайте посторонних слов и длинных бессмысленных предложений.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I like open spaces and natural scenery. For instance, the countryside often has peaceful fields and clear views of the horizon, which are great for wide landscape photos.

Sugestão: Ответ неясен и расплывчат. Рекомендации: 1) Дайте прямой ответ (own country or other countries); 2) Объясните причину, используя конкретику (different cultures, architecture, nature); 3) Используйте связки (for example, because, although); 4) Удерживайте объём — не более 3–4 предложений, говорите связно и по существу.

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultures. For example, I enjoy photographing foreign architecture and street scenes that are unique and unfamiliar, which helps me learn more about the place.

× Uh-huh. The music. I didn't want to play pictures of salsa and sunglasses because average mucus is very colorful in moments of cultural nature when this makes me feel better.

✓ Yes. I like music. I didn't want to show pictures of salsa and sunglasses because average music is very colorful in moments of cultural expression and it makes me feel better.

The original sentence is disjointed and contains incorrect or nonsensical words (mucus instead of music) and poor sentence structure. The correction replaces wrong words, connects ideas with conjunctions, and clarifies meaning. Suggestion: replace incorrect vocabulary, combine fragments into complete sentences, and use clear nouns and relative phrases (for example, 'moments of cultural expression').

× I reached out for a week use a very beautiful and boss like more than ever.

✓ I stayed there for a week; it was very beautiful and I liked it more than ever.

The original sentence uses incorrect verbs and word order ('reached out', 'use', 'boss like'), causing confusion. The correction uses appropriate verbs and structure: 'stayed there for a week' and 'I liked it more than ever.' Suggestion: use clear past-tense verbs for completed actions and keep subject-verb-object order.

× It has all right and on her address.

✓ It had everything right and the correct address.

The original uses inappropriate pronouns and present tense 'has' for a past context. The correction uses past tense 'had' and replaces 'on her address' with 'the correct address.' Suggestion: match tense and use appropriate noun phrases instead of unclear pronouns.

× It has only this floor and betrayal meaning.

✓ It only had one floor and an atmosphere that felt disappointing.

The original sentence is unclear and uses 'betrayal' incorrectly. The correction clarifies intended meaning by specifying 'one floor' and replacing 'betrayal meaning' with 'an atmosphere that felt disappointing.' Suggestion: choose words that match intended meaning and keep clear noun modifiers.

× Also it is because it depends on dangerous whatever.

✓ Also, it depends on how dangerous the area is.

The original phrase 'depends on dangerous whatever' is ungrammatical and vague. The correction provides a standard structure: 'depends on how dangerous the area is.' Suggestion: use 'depends on' followed by a clear clause or noun phrase describing the condition.

× And then the coverage for the reference, I had a, a little bag like a controversy special.

✓ Regarding that trip, I had a small bag that was quite special.

The original is confusing with misplaced nouns ('coverage for the reference') and odd modifiers ('controversy special'). The correction simplifies to a coherent clause: 'Regarding that trip' and clarifies the description of the bag. Suggestion: remove unnecessary filler and use clear nouns and adjectives.

× And I love to have new places where you can see of the views you never see and that it's very, uh, illustrating things.

✓ I love visiting new places where you can see views you've never seen before; they are very inspiring.

The original contains redundancy ('see of the views you never see') and awkward phrasing ('illustrating things'). The correction removes redundancy, uses present-tense general preference 'I love visiting', and replaces 'illustrating things' with 'inspiring.' Suggestion: avoid repeating verbs, use concise relative clauses, and choose precise adjectives.