Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler and grammar errors, and give one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Use correct tense and phrasing (e.g., "I like taking photos of different views").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, when I visit a new place with friends, I often photograph interesting buildings or landscapes so I can remember the experience and share it later.

Sugestão: Clarify and correct contradictions and reduce hesitations. Provide a clear reason and one supporting detail using linking words. Avoid saying you prefer urban but then emphasize open/green spaces without explanation.

Exemplo: I prefer views in urban areas because I grew up there and enjoy the mix of architecture and parks. For instance, city parks and riverside walks combine green spaces with interesting buildings, which I find appealing.

Sugestão: Be concise and avoid repetition. State your preference clearly, give a reason, and add a specific example to support it. Fix minor grammar issues (e.g., "I was raised" -> "I grew up").

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because I grew up in Japan and feel connected to the landscapes there. For example, I love visiting the rice terraces near my hometown because they remind me of childhood walks with my family.

× Yes, I like.

✓ Yes, I do.

The short answer to a yes/no question about liking something requires the auxiliary verb do for emphasis and correctness in English. 'Yes, I like' is incomplete; use 'Yes, I do' or a full sentence like 'Yes, I like taking pictures.' Recommendation: use 'Yes, I do' for a brief affirmative reply or complete the idea with the verb and object.

× Normally when I hang out with my friend or go somewhere where I don't I'm not used to or touched by something, I normally take pictures.

✓ Normally, when I hang out with my friend or go somewhere I'm not used to or that moves me, I usually take pictures.

The original sentence has structural issues and unclear phrasing: 'where I don't I'm not used to or touched by something' is ungrammatical. Corrected version simplifies the relative clause and replaces 'touched by something' with 'that moves me' to convey emotion. Also changed the second 'normally' to 'usually' to avoid repetition. Suggestion: break complex ideas into clear clauses and ensure each clause has a subject and verb.

× I prefer uh, views in urban areas because I'm used to, uh, open spaces.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas, although I'm used to open spaces.

The phrase 'I'm used to, uh, open spaces' is acceptable but the sentence logic is contradictory (preferring urban views but being used to open spaces). If the intent is contrast, use 'although' or 'but'. Also removed filler 'uh' and added comma for clarity. Suggestion: remove fillers and use conjunctions to show contrast.

× Uh, as I raised in uh, urban areas, I love seeing green landscapes.

✓ I was raised in an urban area, so I love seeing green landscapes.

The phrase 'as I raised in urban areas' incorrectly uses active voice; the correct passive form is 'I was raised.' Also use 'an urban area' or 'urban areas' consistently. Replaced filler 'uh' and connected clauses with 'so' for cause-effect. Suggestion: use passive for upbringing (was raised) and choose singular/plural consistently.

× I prefer views in my country because I was raised in Japan and I'm familiar with the scenery of the areas in my hometown and also I love seeing green space spaces.

✓ I prefer views in my country because I was raised in Japan, I'm familiar with the scenery in my hometown, and I also love seeing green spaces.

Problems: repeated word 'space spaces', awkward phrase 'scenery of the areas in my hometown.' Corrections: use 'scenery in my hometown' and plural 'green spaces'. Added commas and conjunctions for clearer list structure. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use parallel structure when listing reasons.