Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid vague words like "tree" when you mean "trip". Use one or two supporting details with linking words. Also keep to fewer than five sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos when I visit new places. For example, I often photograph landscapes and local landmarks to add to a digital album, and later I look through the photos to recall the trip and special moments.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and use accurate vocabulary. Avoid unclear phrases and numbers ("16") unless meaningful. Use one specific example and linking words to explain why you prefer urban views. Keep sentences grammatically correct and concise.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because cities offer diverse architecture and vibrant street life. For example, when I walk through old quarters I notice different building styles and lively markets, which makes exploring more interesting.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and correct grammatical errors. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "haven't visited yet" instead of "have visited yet"). Provide two specific examples and a linking phrase to explain your preference.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because China is vast and offers great variety. For example, I want to see the mountains in Yunnan and the coastal scenery in Guangdong, so I can better appreciate the different landscapes at home.

× Of course, whatever I visit new places, I like to take some pictures to add to my picture album.

✓ Of course, whenever I visit new places, I like to take some pictures to add to my photo album.

The sentence uses 'whatever' incorrectly; 'whenever' is the correct conjunction to mean 'every time that'. Also 'picture album' is acceptable but 'photo album' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'whenever' for repeated occasions and prefer 'photo album' for natural phrasing.

× Looking back through the album later helps me remember the tree and the special moments I experienced.

✓ Looking back through the album later helps me remember the places and the special moments I experienced.

'the tree' is likely incorrect quantifier/noun choice in context; 'places' fits meaning. The issue is word choice/quantifier: replace with plural noun matching 'places' to reflect multiple views. Suggestion: use plural 'places' or specify which tree if singular.

× I prefer views in urban areas because each city has 16 culture and character.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because each city has its own culture and character.

'16' is a typo/incorrect quantifier and should be 'its own' to indicate possession. This is an incorrect use of quantifiers/words. Suggestion: use 'its own' to show that each city possesses unique traits.

× For example, walking through all quarter or models Galilei reveals different architecture and St. life which I found very interesting.

✓ For example, walking through old quarters or models like Galilei reveals different architecture and street life, which I find very interesting.

The original has multiple issues: 'all quarter' is ungrammatical (use 'old quarters' or 'historic quarters'), 'models Galilei' is unclear—assumed 'models like Galilei' or 'areas like Galilei', 'St. life' should be 'street life'. Tense and relative clause corrected: 'which I find very interesting' fits general preference. Suggestion: choose clear nouns and maintain consistent present-tense opinion.

× I prefer views in my own country because China is so large and there are many places I have visited yet.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because China is so large and there are many places I have not visited yet.

The sentence uses 'visited yet' incorrectly; standard English requires 'have not visited yet' for negative present perfect. This is an incorrect use of quantifier/negation. Suggestion: insert 'not' before 'visited' to form the negative.

× Especially want to see different landscape from the mountains in Yunnan to the castle light in Guangdong so I can better appreciate the variety at home.

✓ I especially want to see different landscapes, from the mountains in Yunnan to the castle lights in Guangdong, so I can better appreciate the variety at home.

Missing subject 'I' is a sentence structure issue combined with adjective/noun forms: 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' and 'castle light' likely 'castle lights' or 'castles lit up' depending on meaning. Added commas for clarity. Suggestion: include the subject, use plural nouns when listing varied examples, and ensure noun phrases are natural (e.g., 'castle lights' or 'castles lit up').