Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), correct grammar (e.g., 'beautiful scenery' not 'a beautiful scenery'), and provide one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Keep to 2–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of landscapes because they capture peaceful moments. For example, I often photograph mountains and rivers when I hike, which helps me remember the places and feel relaxed afterward.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence, reduce hesitations, and use linking words to explain reasons. Be specific about what appeals to you in rural areas and limit to 2–4 sentences with correct plurals ('rural areas', 'rivers').

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because they offer wide open spaces and vivid natural scenery. For instance, green fields and rivers provide colorful backdrops that make photos more striking, and the quiet atmosphere helps me focus on composition.

Sugestão: Answer directly and clearly. State your preference (both) in one sentence, then explain with two specific reasons, using linking words like 'however' or 'sometimes'. Avoid repetition and correct word choice ('I value the comfort of familiar places' and 'I crave the excitement').

Exemplo: I like both local and foreign views because each offers something different. Sometimes I value the comfort and familiarity of local places, but other times I crave the excitement of exploring new landscapes and cultures abroad.

× Yes, I enjoy uh, capturing a beautiful scenery, uh, like mountains and rivers and uh field uh.

✓ Yes, I enjoy capturing beautiful scenery, like mountains, rivers, and fields.

Use of 'enjoy' requires a verb in -ing form (gerund), which is correct for 'capturing', but 'a beautiful scenery' is incorrect: 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not take 'a' or be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Also 'field' should be plural to match examples. Remove filler hesitations and add commas for clarity.

× This makes me remember a beautiful name, moments and places.

✓ These moments and places make me remember beautiful names and memories.

The original sentence misuses 'this' for plural items and 'name' is unclear; likely meant 'memories' or 'names'. Change to plural demonstrative 'these' to match plural nouns. Reorder for natural English: 'These moments and places make me remember beautiful memories/names.'

× I consider their photography as a relaxing hobby for me.

✓ I consider photography a relaxing hobby for myself.

'Their photography' is unclear—if referring to the student's own activity, use 'photography'. 'Consider X as Y' is less natural than 'consider X Y'. Use reflexive pronoun 'myself' or simply omit 'for me'.

× I need to.

✓ I need to do it.

The fragment 'I need to.' is incomplete; 'need to' requires a following verb phrase. Add an object or verb phrase such as 'do it' to complete the sentence.

× Uh, to be honest, I prefer the rural area, there are many uh, open spaces and natural scenery like mountains, river and uh, green fields.

✓ To be honest, I prefer rural areas; there are many open spaces and natural scenery like mountains, rivers, and green fields.

Use plural 'rural areas' to match general preference. 'There are' is correct for plural items; 'river' should be plural 'rivers'. Remove filler words and join clauses properly with a semicolon or conjunction.

× So umm, this makes the pictures more beautiful and the natural and colorful in addition, I prefer.

✓ So, this makes the pictures more beautiful, natural, and colorful; I prefer that.

Original has awkward structure and extra words. Use parallel adjectives 'beautiful, natural, and colorful'. 'In addition, I prefer' is incomplete—clarify what is preferred, e.g., 'I prefer that.' Remove fillers.

× It'll be honest, uh, I prefer both foreign and uh, local, uh, local, uh, places, uh, local places, uh, I prefer the, uh, foreign and uh, local, uh, places that sometimes I appreciate the comfort of, uh, for a familiar places or other times I grave excitements of exploring different and.

✓ To be honest, I prefer both foreign and local places. Sometimes I appreciate the comfort of familiar places, and other times I crave the excitement of exploring different ones.

'It'll be honest' is incorrect; use 'To be honest'. Remove fillers and repetition. 'A familiar places' mixes singular article with plural noun—change to 'familiar places' or 'a familiar place'. 'Grave' is incorrect word choice; correct verb 'crave'. Finish the sentence with 'different ones' to refer back to 'places'. Ensure subject-verb agreement and proper verb forms.