Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Clarify the reason and avoid irrelevant ideas. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar and avoid confusing 'drawing' with photography. Use one or two supporting details with linking words. For example, say you prefer describing because of skill or equipment and give a brief example.

Exemplo: No, I don't. I'm not very confident taking photos because I don't have a good camera and I struggle with composition. For example, when I tried to photograph a park, the pictures looked blurry, so I usually describe scenes verbally instead.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and develop one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid hesitations and incorrect words (e.g. 'urban terror'). Mention specific city features you like and finish with a concise conclusion. Keep within five sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer urban views because I grew up in a big city like Shanghai. For instance, I enjoy the skyline, busy streets and diverse restaurants, which feel familiar and exciting. Therefore, city scenes are more appealing to me than rural landscapes.

Sugestão: Provide a direct answer and support it with clear, specific reasons. Correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g. 'show the wisdom of ancient Chinese culture' instead of unclear fragments). Use linking words to connect ideas and give a concrete example of a landmark and why you like it.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because China has many historic landmarks that show the wisdom of ancient Chinese culture. For example, the Great Wall and the Forbidden City are fascinating for their architecture and history, so I enjoy visiting domestic sites.

× I think I'd better to describe different views just by talking.

✓ I think I'd better describe different views just by talking.

After 'had better' or its contraction 'I'd better', use the base form of the verb without 'to'. Remove 'to' before 'describe'. Suggestion: remember the pattern 'had better + verb' (e.g., 'I'd better go').

× Hmm best, uh, Shanghai.

✓ The best is Shanghai.

This fragment lacks clear grammatical structure. To answer which city is best, use a full sentence like 'The best is Shanghai' or 'Shanghai is the best.' Suggestion: provide a complete subject and verb for clarity.

× I used to live in urban terror.

✓ I used to live in an urban area.

'Urban terror' is incorrect and likely a mispronunciation of 'urban area' or 'urban center.' Use 'an urban area' for grammatical accuracy. Also include the indefinite article 'an' before a singular count noun beginning with a vowel sound.

× So many things I'm familiar with which make me.

✓ There are so many things I am familiar with that make me feel at home.

The original is a fragment and lacks a clear verb phrase. Adding 'There are' creates a subject, and completing the clause with 'that make me feel at home' gives a clear meaning. Suggestion: ensure clauses have subjects and verbs and use 'that' or 'which' correctly to introduce relative clauses.

× I like the views in my country because China has a lot of landmarks which should the wisdom of ancient chi Chinese.

✓ I like the views in my country because China has a lot of landmarks that show the wisdom of ancient Chinese people.

Problems: incorrect verb 'should' should be 'show'; 'chi Chinese' appears to be garbled — use 'Chinese people' or 'Chinese civilization'; 'which' is better as 'that' in defining clauses. Suggestion: use 'show' to mean 'display' and 'ancient Chinese people' or 'Chinese civilization' for clarity.

× There were so many great religion from our.

✓ There were so many great religions from our history.

Original sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. Use the plural 'religions' and add a source phrase, e.g., 'from our history' or 'in our country.' Suggestion: make sure to include the noun's modifier to state where the religions come from (e.g., 'from our history' or 'in our culture').