Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and correct repetition and hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce filler words and correct grammar (e.g., avoid repeating phrases and fix pronoun usage).

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. For example, I often photograph cityscapes to capture lively streets and architecture, and when I travel I focus on landscapes and local people to preserve memories.

Sugestão: Provide a clearer structure: state preference or neutrality, then give two concise, specific reasons with linking words. Reduce fillers and use consistent tense and plural/singular forms.

Exemplo: It depends on my mood: for instance, I prefer urban areas when I want energetic scenes because city streets and people create dynamic photos; however, I choose rural areas when I want peaceful landscapes and to document local culture.

Sugestão: Fix grammar and factual phrasing, avoid repetition, and give two clear supporting details with linking words. Use accurate facts and smoother expressions (e.g., "eight of the ten highest mountains").

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because Nepal offers spectacular scenery; for example, it contains eight of the ten highest mountains in the world, and also features diverse landscapes such as the Himalayas, lakes, and rivers that are great for photography.

× Yes, I do. I like to take pictures of my I like to take pictures of myself, scenery, cities. Basically I like to explore new places, visit, uh, experiment, meet new people, so to capture the moment.

✓ Yes, I do. I like to take pictures of myself, scenery, and cities. Basically, I like to explore new places, travel, meet new people, and capture the moment.

The original contains a repeated fragment ('I like to take pictures of my I like to take pictures of myself') and an unclear list with inappropriate verbs ('visit, experiment') causing sentence structure errors (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Remove the repetition and use parallel structure in the list: use noun phrases or verbs in the same form ('explore', 'travel', 'meet', 'capture'). Add commas and 'and' for proper coordination and readability.

× It depends. Sometimes I like to capture the vibrant, uh, city views and the happening place over there with the people in it, while sometime when I'm traveling to a natural scenery place, I like the calm nature of the countryside, the local people over there, their culture.

✓ It depends. Sometimes I like to capture vibrant city views and the busy places with people in them, while sometimes when I'm traveling to a natural area, I enjoy the calm countryside, the local people, and their culture.

Problems include incorrect adjective/adverb forms and inconsistent singular/plural forms (use 'sometime' vs 'sometimes', 'happening place' is informal and singular vs plural). This mixes adjective/adverb usage and plurality (Grammar Problem Type ID 13 and 1). Use 'sometimes' (adverb) and 'busy places' (adjective + plural noun). Replace 'natural scenery place' with 'natural area' for idiomatic usage and ensure parallel list 'the local people, and their culture.'

× In this case, I would love to choose my country. Nepal is a very beautiful country with beautiful landscape. Uh, it has uh eight highest mountain among the 10 in the world. It it has all the scene scenery like Himalayan mountain and lakes river.

✓ In this case, I would choose my own country. Nepal is a very beautiful country with beautiful landscapes. It has eight of the ten highest mountains in the world. It also has all kinds of scenery, such as the Himalayan mountains, lakes, and rivers.

Multiple article and count/word-choice errors (Grammar Problem Type ID 22 and 1). Use 'choose my own country' for clarity. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' when general. The phrase should be 'eight of the ten highest mountains' to show correct comparison and quantity. Use 'all kinds of scenery' and plural nouns 'Himalayan mountains, lakes, and rivers' for natural items. Also remove repeated 'It it' and correct word order for clarity.