Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and give one or two specific examples with linking words. Correct vocabulary (e.g. ‘scenic’ not ‘insectic’) and grammar (remove duplicated phrases) will improve clarity.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I often take photos of sunsets and forest landscapes to capture their colours and atmosphere, so I can remember the moment later.

Sugestão: Begin with a clear direct answer, use correct prepositions and word forms, and support with a specific reason and example. Replace unclear words (e.g. ‘salience’) with simpler accurate terms like ‘beauty’ or ‘tranquillity’.

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy hiking in the mountains and experiencing the tranquillity of natural forests. For instance, last month I hiked a nearby trail and took photos of peaceful streams and tall trees.

Sugestão: Give a clear direct statement, avoid repetition, and use correct article and noun forms (e.g. ‘Taiwan’ not ‘the Taiwan’). Provide specific contrasting details and one example to support your preference.

Exemplo: I definitely prefer views in my own country, Taiwan, because it has both mountains and coastline close together. For example, I can drive an hour from a mountain trail to a sandy beach, which makes a variety of scenery easy to enjoy.

× I often go to go to the I will take some pictures about sunsets, the forest and everything I like I think is insectic scene.

✓ I often go out to take pictures of sunsets, the forest, and everything I like; I think they are interesting scenes.

Original sentence contains repeated and incorrect verbs ('go to go to', 'I will take') and wrong phrase 'about' for taking photos. This is a verb form and sentence structure issue: use the base form 'to take' after 'go out to' and use 'of' to indicate what you photograph. Also 'insectic scene' is unclear; I replaced it with 'interesting scenes' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify actions (e.g., 'I often go out to take pictures of...') and use correct prepositions ('of').

× Uh, I want to take a picture to record it.

✓ Uh, I want to take a picture to record it.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. It correctly uses 'to take' to express purpose. Retained for completeness.

× I will level with you. I prefer to rural areas because I like to go mountain and go hiking and enjoy the salience of the natural forest.

✓ I'll be honest with you. I prefer rural areas because I like to go to the mountains, go hiking, and enjoy the scenery of the natural forest.

Problems include incorrect verb phrases ('prefer to rural areas', 'go mountain') and awkward word choice 'salience'. This is primarily verb form and preposition use: use 'prefer rural areas' (no 'to') and 'go to the mountains'. Replace 'salience' with 'scenery' for natural view. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('go to the mountains') and simpler vocabulary ('scenery').

× I prefer to rural areas because I like to go mountain and go hiking and enjoy the salience of the natural forest.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I like to go to the mountains, go hiking, and enjoy the scenery of the natural forest.

Original omitted the article/number agreement and preposition before 'mountains'. Use 'the mountains' or simply 'mountains' with 'go to'. Also 'the natural forest' is acceptable but 'scenery of natural forests' could be used. Suggestion: ensure correct use of articles and prepositions with geographical nouns.

× Definitely my country. I think the Taiwan is the best country in the world because it's around the oceans and mountain.

✓ Definitely my country. I think Taiwan is the best country in the world because it's surrounded by ocean and mountains.

Do not use 'the' before country names like 'Taiwan'. Use 'surrounded by' rather than 'around the oceans and mountain', and use plural 'mountains' and uncountable 'ocean' or 'the ocean' depending on context. Suggestion: omit 'the' before most country names and use correct verb phrases ('surrounded by').

× It's surrounding the ocean and mountain.

✓ It is surrounded by the ocean and mountains.

Incorrect verb form 'surrounding' and wrong article usage 'mountain'. Use passive 'is surrounded by' to describe Taiwan's location and plural 'mountains'. Suggestion: use passive construction for description and correct pluralization.

× You can if you want to bachelor sea, you can go to the beach if you want to go to.

✓ If you want to enjoy the sea, you can go to the beach.

Original is ungrammatical and contains nonsense phrase 'bachelor sea' and repeated fragments. This is a sentence structure and word choice issue. Replace with clear conditional structure: 'If you want to enjoy the sea, you can go to the beach.' Suggestion: plan the sentence before speaking, use simple conditional forms (If + present, will/can + verb) and avoid repeating fragments.

× I prefer to rural areas because I like to go mountain and go hiking and enjoy the salience of the natural forest.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I like to go to the mountains, go hiking, and enjoy the scenery of the natural forest.

The phrase 'prefer to rural areas' incorrectly uses 'to' after 'prefer' and 'go mountain' misses the preposition 'to'. This is a preposition error. Suggestion: use 'prefer rural areas' and 'go to the mountains'.