Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrasing like "maybe it will become an impressive moment" and unnecessary fillers.

Exemplo: Yes — I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me capture memories. For example, I often take photos of sunsets and city skylines so I can remember the light and mood of a place later.

Sugestão: Improve clarity and grammar: give a direct topic sentence, then one clear reason with a specific example. Remove awkward phrases like "transform my feelings and experiences in" and fix tense and article errors.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and contrast with my busy city life. For instance, I like photographing quiet fields and rivers when I visit the countryside to relax and reflect.

Sugestão: Reduce hesitations and be specific: avoid filler words ("umm") and use precise descriptions. Give one clear reason and a concrete example or comparison. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Exemplo: I prefer views in my own country because it has impressive mountain ranges and diverse natural scenery. For example, I enjoy taking photos of the rugged mountains near my town as well as the historic architecture in our cities.

× I prefer views in rural areas because since I live in urban area and get used to the fast and busy life speed so I prefer to transform my feelings and experiences in.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I live in an urban area and am used to the fast, busy pace of life, so I prefer to express my feelings and experiences there.

Errors: incorrect and missing prepositions ('in urban area' should be 'in an urban area'); awkward phrase 'get used to the fast and busy life speed' should be 'am used to the fast, busy pace of life' (preposition and noun choice). Also 'transform my feelings and experiences in' has incorrect preposition and verb choice — 'express ... there' is natural. Suggestion: use 'in an urban area' with article 'an', replace 'get used to' with 'am used to' for present state, use 'pace' instead of 'speed', and use 'express ... there' to indicate location of preference.

× I prefer views in my own country Umm, since we have the Umm Splendid mountains and the natural umm scenarios Umm.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because we have splendid mountains and beautiful natural scenery.

Errors: inappropriate capitalization and unnecessary 'the' before plural 'Splendid mountains' and wrong noun 'scenarios' instead of 'scenery'. Also filler 'Umm' should be removed in written form. Use lowercase for common adjectives. Suggestion: remove fillers, use 'splendid mountains' and 'natural scenery' and omit unnecessary definite articles.

× At the same time we also have the Umm Good City.

✓ At the same time, we also have a great city.

Errors: 'Good City' is unnatural as a proper noun and 'Umm' filler should be removed. Missing article before singular countable noun: use 'a great city'. Suggestion: use appropriate adjective (great) and include the indefinite article 'a' before singular noun, and remove fillers.

× Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because I think it's a brilliant way to record what you see at that moment and maybe it will become an impressive moment for you in the future.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because I think it's a great way to record what you see in the moment, and it may become an impressive memory for you in the future.

Errors: 'do like' is grammatically acceptable but unnecessary emphasis; 'brilliant' is okay but 'great' more natural. 'at that moment' is wordy — 'in the moment' is more natural. 'become an impressive moment' is wrong collocation; use 'impressive memory'. Suggestion: simplify present tense to 'I like', use natural collocations like 'in the moment' and 'impressive memory', and replace 'maybe' with 'may' for smoother phrasing.