Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more specific and expand briefly with one clear reason and a linking word. Avoid vague phrase like "tends to" and give a concrete detail about what about the buildings reminds you of home (style, color, or memories). Keep to max 3–4 sentences.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy photographing old buildings because their architecture and ornamentation remind me of the neighborhood where I grew up. For example, the red-brick facades and narrow balconies take me back to weekend walks with my family.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words to contrast the two options and give specific reasons for each. Correct unclear words (e.g. "boards") and avoid grammatical errors. Keep answer to 3–4 concise sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer both urban and rural views for different reasons. Urban views make me feel at home because the modern buildings and busy streets are familiar. On the other hand, rural scenes are peaceful and remind me of visiting my grandmother’s village during festivals, when the fields and old houses feel very comforting.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence and concise supporting details using linking words (e.g. "however", "because"). Remove repetitions and fix errors ("I I", "using my country"). Be specific about what you learn abroad (culture, architecture, food) and contrast with what you appreciate at home.

Exemplo: I like views in both my country and other countries. At home I appreciate familiar cultural details and landscapes that connect me to my roots. However, when I travel abroad I enjoy seeing different architectural styles and local customs, which broaden my understanding of other cultures.

× I like taking pictures of buildings because it tends to remind me of back home.

✓ I like taking pictures of buildings because they tend to remind me of home.

Subject 'pictures' is plural, so the verb and pronoun must agree. 'It tends to remind me' is incorrect for plural 'pictures'; use 'they tend to remind me'. Also 'back home' can be shortened to 'home'.

× Actually I like boards.

✓ Actually I like both.

The student likely meant 'both' (referring to urban and rural areas). 'Boards' is a wrong word choice; replace with the correct pronoun 'both'.

× Urban areas remind me of home, like where I live with my parents.

✓ Urban areas remind me of home, like the place where I live with my parents.

The original is understandable but would be clearer with 'the place' to indicate location. This improves sentence structure and clarity.

× Why rural areas remind me of the village like when I go and visit my grandma during the festive period.

✓ Rural areas remind me of the village, for example when I visit my grandma during the festive period.

The sentence begins with 'Why' which is incorrect here. Use a clear conjunction or phrase such as 'for example' and a proper clause order: main clause then example. Also 'go and visit' is wordy; 'visit' suffices.

× I I like both.

✓ I like both.

The sentence contains a repeated pronoun 'I I' likely a slip; remove the duplication. No tense change needed.

× I like my country. I like using my country.

✓ I like my country. I enjoy visiting other countries too.

'I like using my country' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended meaning is liking own country and also other countries. Replace with 'I enjoy visiting other countries too' or 'I like my country and I like other countries too' to match context.

× Yes, it's my country and I like other countries too, because that means I get to expand my knowledge of what I see and what I hear.

✓ Yes, it's my country, and I like other countries too, because that lets me expand my knowledge of what I see and hear.

Sentence is mostly correct but can be tightened: use 'lets' instead of 'means I get to' for conciseness, and 'what I see and hear' avoids repetition of 'what'.