Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and communicates the idea, but it is a bit long-winded, contains hesitations and some grammatical mistakes, and exceeds the natural sentence limit. Improve by making a clear topic sentence, reducing filler words, correcting grammar, and adding one specific example. Use one linking phrase to connect the reason.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. I take photos of views because they preserve memories I can revisit later. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach so I can remember the exact colours and mood of a relaxing holiday.

Sugestão: Good preference and clear opinion, but reduce hesitations and avoid vague or overly emotional phrases like “as how God intended it to be.” Expand with one concrete detail to support why rural views appeal to you, and use a linking word to make the answer smoother.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they feel more natural and untouched. For instance, wide fields and quiet forests help me relax and notice small details like wildflowers and birdsong.

Sugestão: The idea is understandable, but the answer is incomplete and repetitive, with unclear vocabulary (“sense of maintenance”). Finish your thought, replace vague phrases with specific comparisons, and avoid repetition. Use one linking word to compare both options and give a short example of what you mean by “newness.”

Exemplo: I would prefer views in other countries because their urban areas often have newer architecture and well-kept public spaces, which feel fresh and different. In contrast, views in India are familiar and charming, but sometimes more crowded or worn.

× Yes I do, I like taking pictures of different views as they are stored as memories, uh, which I can look back to, which I might not remember that I had experience just to make me smile on day when I've been off.

✓ Yes, I do. I like taking pictures of different views because they are stored as memories that I can look back on and that can make me smile on days when I'm feeling down.

Issues: sentence structure errors (26), incorrect preposition use (11), tense consistency/present tense (6), and punctuation/clarity. 'look back to' should be 'look back on'; 'which I might not remember that I had experience' is ungrammatical and should be simplified to 'that I can look back on and that can make me smile'; 'on day when I've been off' should be 'on days when I'm feeling down' for natural present-tense meaning. Combine fragments into clear sentences and maintain present tense for habitual action.

× Honestly, I'm more of a fan of views from rural areas.

✓ Honestly, I'm more of a fan of views from rural areas.

Subject-verb agreement is correct here so no change needed. This entry is included to indicate no error from the provided list.

× Uh, because they feel more raw, more untouched.

✓ They feel more raw and untouched.

Sentence fragment: beginning with 'Because' creates a fragment. Remove the subordinating conjunction and join into a complete sentence. Also replace comma with 'and' for smoother coordination.

× They show me the world as how God intended it to be, and that's it.

✓ They show me the world as God intended it to be, and that's it.

Incorrect use of conjunction/structure: 'as how' is ungrammatical. Use either 'as' or 'how' but not both. Removing 'how' corrects the clause. Third person singular verb 'intended' is correct.

× If I had to choose, I would prefer views from other countries because they have a sense of maintenance, a sense of newness to them, which are two things that bring that uniqueness in enjoying them.

✓ If I had to choose, I would prefer views from other countries because they have a sense of upkeep and newness, which are two qualities that make them feel more unique and enjoyable.

Tense/modal structure is acceptable (conditional). Problems fixed: word choice ('maintenance' -> 'upkeep'), redundancy and awkward phrasing ('a sense of newness to them' -> 'newness'), relative clause agreement ('which are two things that bring that uniqueness in enjoying them' -> 'which are two qualities that make them feel more unique and enjoyable'). These changes improve grammar and clarity.

× In my own country, which is India, they're good, but they.

✓ In my own country, which is India, they are good, but not as striking.

Plural/singular and sentence fragment issues: original ends with 'but they.' which is incomplete. Replace contraction 'they're' with 'they are' for clarity and complete the contrast with an appropriate clause. Provide a comparative adjective to finish the sentence and match plural subject 'they'.