Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and coherent with good supporting details and an example. To improve, make the opening more natural (e.g., "Yes, I do") by saying "Yes, I do" or "Yes, I enjoy taking pictures." Also avoid a minor grammar lapse ("I do pictures") and shorten or combine sentences to stay within the five-sentence limit. Use a linking phrase to connect the general idea and the example (e.g., "For instance" or "Because of this").

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. They are a wonderful way to preserve memories, because when I scroll through them I can instantly recall places and experiences. For instance, I often take landscape shots when I travel to remember the atmosphere and weather of each day.

Sugestão: Strong, direct topic sentence and specific reasons. To reach a higher score, replace vague phrases like "these things" with a clearer reference (e.g., "such scenery") and use a stronger linking word before the example (e.g., "For example" or "For instance"). Also keep sentences concise and avoid repetition ("relax me and refresh my mind" could be tightened).

Exemplo: I prefer views in rural areas because breathtaking landscapes and open fields make me feel close to nature. For example, such scenery relaxes and refreshes me when I go hiking in the countryside.

Sugestão: Well-structured answer with clear reasons and a concrete example. To improve further, use a succinct topic sentence and a linking phrase between your opinion and the consequence (e.g., "As a result"). Also consider specifying which aspects of foreign scenery you find most interesting to add more detail (e.g., architecture, vegetation, or community life).

Exemplo: I prefer the scenery in other countries because they often showcase unique cultural landscapes and traditions. As a result, seeing exotic views gives me new perspectives on everyday life; for example, visiting a coastal village abroad once helped me appreciate how communities adapt to tides and fishing seasons.

× Yes, I do pictures.

✓ Yes, I take pictures.

The student used 'do pictures', which is not correct collocation in English. The verb 'take' is used with 'pictures' (take pictures). This is a sentence structure/verb choice error; replace 'do' with 'take' to make it natural and grammatically correct.

× I prefer views in rural areas because breathtaking landscapes and open fields make me feel close to nature.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the breathtaking landscapes and open fields make me feel close to nature.

Although the original is understandable, adding the definite article 'the' before 'breathtaking landscapes and open fields' makes the reference to those specific kinds of scenery clearer and more natural. This is an article/phrase clarity issue; include 'the' for fluency.

× These things relax me and refresh my mind, for example, when I go hiking in the countryside.

✓ For example, going hiking in the countryside relaxes me and refreshes my mind.

The original places 'for example' mid-sentence and uses 'these things' vaguely. Rewriting the sentence to start with 'For example,' and using a gerund phrase 'going hiking' makes the sentence more natural and specific. Also ensure verb agreement: 'relaxes' and 'refreshes' agree with the singular gerund subject.