Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific detail and a reason. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words (e.g., because, so) to connect ideas. Aim for 2–4 sentences and include a concrete example of what you photograph.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph sunsets and mountain scenes because the light and colors change quickly and create dramatic images, so I feel relaxed when I look at them later.

Sugestão: Provide a direct preference then support it with clear, specific details. Remove unclear phrases and filler words. Use linking words (for example, however, while) to contrast urban and rural preferences. Complete your sentences and give examples of subjects you photograph in each setting.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because I enjoy photographing farms and wide open fields; the textures and colors of crops are very photogenic. However, in cities I also like shooting parks and interesting street scenes because they show local life and architecture.

Sugestão: Give a clear opinion (either prefer own country or other countries or say both) and support it with specific comparisons. Avoid vague expressions and finish your thoughts. Use linking words (for example, whereas, because) and mention concrete features you like in each country.

Exemplo: I appreciate views both at home and abroad because each place offers different scenery. For instance, in my country I enjoy photographing agricultural landscapes and rural life, whereas in Canada I would like to capture vast forests and lakes because they offer dramatic natural backdrops.

× Whenever I see something in nature related to something like different or amazing, then I really take a picture.

✓ Whenever I see something in nature that is different or amazing, I take a picture.

The original sentence uses 'related to something like different or amazing' which is awkward and incorrect structure. Use a relative clause 'that is different or amazing' to describe 'something' and remove unnecessary filler 'then' and 'really' for clarity. This corrects the present participle/phrase usage and improves sentence structure. Suggestion: Use clear relative clauses (for example 'that is...') and avoid filler words.

× And whenever I have spare time then I look at these pictures and I feel more happy.

✓ Whenever I have spare time, I look at these pictures and I feel happier.

'More happy' is nonstandard comparative; use 'happier'. Also remove unnecessary 'then' and add a comma after the introductory clause. Keep present simple tense consistent. Suggestion: Use standard comparative forms (adjective + -er or 'more' with multi-syllable adjectives).

× Well, independent tuition or whenever I am in the urban areas, I mostly prefer to click the pictures related to like gym small or like different nature view like big parks.

✓ Well, when I am in urban areas, I mostly prefer to take pictures of small gyms or large parks and other urban nature spots.

Original sentence has disorganized fragments and filler words ('related to like', 'gym small') causing sentence structure errors. Reorder to start with a clear time/place clause 'when I am in urban areas' and use correct noun-adjective order ('small gyms', 'large parks'). Replace 'click the pictures' with the more natural 'take pictures'. Suggestion: Keep clause order clear (time/place then main action) and use correct adjective-noun order.

× And whenever I'm in the rural area, I mostly prefer to click the pictures of farms, agriculture because they're.

✓ Whenever I'm in rural areas, I mostly prefer to take pictures of farms and agricultural fields because they are beautiful.

The fragment ends with 'because they're' which is incomplete; pronoun reference is unclear. Use 'they are' with an explicit adjective ('beautiful') or complete the clause. Also prefer plural 'rural areas' or 'the rural area' consistently and use 'agricultural fields' instead of the noun 'agriculture' to name a place. Suggestion: Complete the clause after 'because' and ensure pronouns clearly refer to a noun.

× Well, every country have a different ability, different local.

✓ Well, every country has different features and local cultures.

'Every country' is singular and requires the singular verb 'has', not 'have'. 'Different ability, different local' is ungrammatical; replace with 'different features and local cultures' for clarity. Suggestion: Ensure singular subjects take singular verbs; choose appropriate nouns to express meaning.

× So I can't go to anyone country like it have a good view because, uh, like in my country, as I say, like there are number of farms, number of agriculture, uh, farms, but uh, whenever I look at the like in Canada, so there are a number of, uh.

✓ So I can't say that any one country has the best views because, in my country, as I said, there are a number of farms and agricultural areas, and when I look at places like Canada, there are also many attractive landscapes.

Multiple errors: 'anyone country' should be 'any one country' or 'any country'; 'it have' should be 'it has' (subject-verb agreement); missing articles before 'number' ('a number of'); awkward phrasing 'number of agriculture' should be 'agricultural areas'. The sentence was also fragmented; rewrite for clarity and correct articles. Suggestion: Use 'any country' and match singular/plural verbs; include articles where required ('a number of').