Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be concise and reduce hesitation and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct minor grammar and collocation errors (e.g., “make it a point” not “make it a loose”).

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. When I visit new places, I always make it a point to photograph landscapes and cityscapes, because photos help me remember the trip and share it with friends.

Sugestão: Give a direct topic sentence and expand with specific sensory details and a linking word. Avoid repeating phrases and correct singular/plural and article use (e.g., “in the countryside” not “in rural area”).

Exemplo: I prefer views of rural areas because, in the countryside, I can enjoy natural scenery and hear birds singing, which helps me relax after a busy week.

Sugestão: Give a clear, grammatical topic sentence and explain why with specific reasons. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words (e.g., “because” or “since”) and correct phrasing (e.g., “views in other countries” rather than “another country's views in another country's”).

Exemplo: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultures, and seeing unfamiliar places is more exciting and inspiring for me.

× Yes, I really love to take take pictures of different views umm, in when I visit somewhere, I always make it a loose to take pictures up there. Uh, I can.

✓ Yes, I really love taking pictures of different views. When I visit somewhere, I always make it a rule to take pictures there.

Original uses 'love to take take' (repetition) and mixes infinitive and -ing. After verbs like 'love' both 'love to take' and 'love taking' can be correct, but 'love taking' sounds more natural here. Also 'make it a loose' is incorrect phrase; correct is 'make it a rule'. Remove filler words and extra 'up there' which is unnecessary. Suggestion: use 'love taking' and 'make it a rule'. Grammar problem type ID:8

× I'd prefer the view. I prefer the view of rural areas. In rural area, in the countryside, I can feel the nature and I can hear the birds.

✓ I'd prefer rural views. In the countryside, I can feel nature and hear the birds.

'The view' is vague and repeated; use plural 'rural views' to match general preference (singular/plural issue too). 'In rural area' lacks the definite article or should be plural; correct form is 'in the countryside' or 'in rural areas'. Also 'feel the nature' is unnatural; use 'feel nature'. Suggestions: use plural or general noun forms and correct article 'the' with 'countryside'. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I prefer views of another country's views in another country's because. It it just very exciting.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because it's just very exciting.

Original repeats 'views' and 'another country's' incorrectly and adds an extraneous 'because.' Use 'in other countries' to express preference for views outside your country. Replace 'It it' with 'it's'. Suggestion: simplify to 'views in other countries because it's just very exciting.' Grammar problem type ID:22