Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific details using correct grammar and word choice. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “this photos” → “these photos”) and unnecessary words like “leisure time activity”—say “hobby” instead. Keep it to at most 3–4 short sentences and use a linking word if you add a second idea.

Exemplo: Yes, I do. Photography is one of my hobbies, and I enjoy taking photos of landscapes and cityscapes. For example, I like capturing sunrise scenes because the light makes the colours more vivid.

Sugestão: Answer directly with a simple topic sentence and give specific, grammatically correct reasons. Use linking words (because, so, and) and correct vocabulary (e.g., “peaceful,” “traditional culture”). Avoid unclear phrases like “no other two views.” Limit to 2–3 sentences and provide one concrete example to support your preference.

Exemplo: I prefer rural areas. I find the countryside more peaceful because there is less noise and more green space, and I enjoy seeing traditional villages and local customs.

Sugestão: Speak clearly and organize your answer: state your preference, then give precise reasons using linking words. Fix grammar errors (e.g., “foreign countries are like why we in terms of visiting” is unclear). Use vocabulary like “learn about,” “customs,” “lifestyle,” and expressions such as “broaden my perspective.” Keep to 2–3 sentences and include a short example if possible.

Exemplo: I prefer visiting other countries because travelling abroad lets me learn about different cultures and customs. For instance, when I visited Japan I discovered unique food traditions and everyday etiquette, which broadened my perspective.

× As photography is my leisure time activity, I love to capture this photos of different sceneries.

✓ Photography is my leisure activity, so I love to capture these photos of different scenes.

Article errors and word choice: 'As photography is my leisure time activity' is awkward; 'Photography is my leisure activity' is natural. 'this photos' uses wrong demonstrative and article: plural noun needs 'these' not 'this'. 'sceneries' is uncommon; use 'scenes'. Also use 'so' to link causes instead of comma splice. Suggestion: use 'Photography is my leisure activity, so I love to capture these photos of different scenes.'

× Well, rural areas are preferred by me, no other two views, because the environment is very peace and we can also enjoy the traditional things.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas to urban ones because the environment is very peaceful and we can enjoy traditional activities.

Pronoun and word choice errors: 'rural areas are preferred by me' is passive and unnatural; use active 'I prefer rural areas'. 'no other two views' is unclear and incorrect—likely meant 'rather than urban ones' or 'to urban areas'. 'the environment is very peace' uses noun 'peace' instead of adjective 'peaceful'. 'traditional things' is vague; use 'traditional activities' or 'traditions'. Suggestion: use clear active structure: 'I prefer rural areas to urban ones because the environment is very peaceful and we can enjoy traditional activities.'

× As I love traveling so foreign countries are like why we in terms of visiting, I can come to know about the foreign culture, custom, lifestyle.

✓ Because I love traveling, I prefer visiting foreign countries; I can learn about their cultures, customs, and lifestyles.

Sentence structure and word choice: The original is disordered and ungrammatical ('foreign countries are like why we in terms of visiting'). Use a clear subordinating conjunction 'Because' and precise verbs: 'prefer visiting foreign countries'. Use plural nouns for consistency: 'cultures, customs, and lifestyles'. 'I can come to know about' is wordy—use 'I can learn about'. Suggestion: restructure sentences with clear connectors and parallel nouns: 'Because I love traveling, I prefer visiting foreign countries; I can learn about their cultures, customs, and lifestyles.'

× It can enhance my knowledge and broad and respect about different cultures.

✓ It can broaden my knowledge and increase my respect for different cultures.

Incorrect word forms and collocations: 'and broad and respect' mixes adjective and noun incorrectly. Use the verb 'broaden' with object 'my knowledge'. Use 'increase my respect for' to express growing respect. Also ensure parallel structure: 'broaden my knowledge and increase my respect for different cultures.' Suggestion: use correct verb forms and preposition 'for' after 'respect'.