Views— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Reduce fillers (uh, um), be more concise, and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (for example, therefore) to connect ideas and avoid repetition.

Exemplo: Yes, I love taking photos of different views because I am passionate about nature. For example, when I see dramatic clouds or flowering trees I photograph them to remember the moment and share the images with my family.

Sugestão: Start with a clear opinion statement, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, whereas). Avoid repeating phrases and reduce hesitation sounds.

Exemplo: I prefer rural views because they offer peaceful natural landscapes, whereas urban areas are dominated by buildings and traffic. For instance, I enjoy open fields and forests where I can relax and take better photos.

Sugestão: Be specific and fluent: remove hesitations, mention particular places clearly, and explain why they appeal to you. Organize the answer: topic sentence, specific examples, and a short concluding remark.

Exemplo: I prefer the scenery in my own country because it has stunning hill stations like Nathiagali and the northern regions. For example, the misty hills and pine forests there create breathtaking views that I enjoy photographing and visiting regularly.

× I do love taking pictures of different views, uh, as I'm, uh, as I love to take pictures and I'm really obsessed with the nature.

✓ I really love taking pictures of different views because I am obsessed with nature.

Redundant phrasing and incorrect article use: 'do love' is emphatic but unnecessary; 'as I'm, as I love' is repetitive and ungrammatical; 'the nature' is incorrect because 'nature' is an uncountable noun used without 'the' in this context. Suggest using a single clear clause, replace 'the nature' with 'nature', and avoid filler words to improve fluency.

× So, uh, whenever I see a clouds or a very beautiful tree or flowers blooming in any place, I always take pictures of them and save them as memories.

✓ So whenever I see a cloud, a beautiful tree, or blooming flowers anywhere, I always take pictures of them and save them as memories.

Plural/singular mismatch and article errors: 'a clouds' mixes singular article with plural noun; choose singular 'a cloud' or plural 'clouds' without 'a'. 'in any place' is awkward; use 'anywhere'. 'flowers blooming' is better as 'blooming flowers'. Keep parallel structure in the list and remove filler 'uh'.

× I prefer views of the rural areas as I'm obsessed with nature and in, uh, urban areas there is, uh, everywhere there are buildings and traffic.

✓ I prefer views of rural areas because I'm obsessed with nature; in urban areas there are buildings and traffic everywhere.

Incorrect article and word order: 'the rural areas' is acceptable but 'views of rural areas' is more natural. The clause 'in, uh, urban areas there is, uh, everywhere there are buildings' mixes singular 'is' with plural 'buildings' and has redundant 'everywhere'. Use plural verb 'are' and place 'everywhere' at the end for natural English.

× So uh, I prefer, uh, seeing the nature in rural area.

✓ So I prefer seeing nature in rural areas.

Article and number errors: 'the nature' should be 'nature' (no article), and 'rural area' should be plural 'rural areas' to match the general preference. Remove filler 'uh' and extra commas.

× I prefer the views in my own country because, uh, in my country there are very, uh, beautiful hills and many, uh, uh, especially in, uh, in muddy and in Nathiagali or in the northern region of, uh, the Pakistan,

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because there are very beautiful hills, especially in Murree and Nathiagali in the northern region of Pakistan.

Article and vocabulary errors: 'the Pakistan' is incorrect; country names usually do not take 'the'. 'muddy' seems to be a mispronunciation or error—likely 'Murree' (a hill station) is intended; clarify to a real place. Remove unnecessary commas and filler 'uh'. Use 'especially in' before specific places and 'in the northern region of Pakistan' without 'the' before 'Pakistan'.

× so, uh, there is a very, uh, good scenery. So I always check.

✓ There is very good scenery there, so I always visit and take photos.

Awkward phrasing and verb choice: 'there is a very good scenery' is incorrect because 'scenery' is uncountable and does not take 'a'; use 'very good scenery' or 'a beautiful view'. 'I always check' is vague and ungrammatical in this context—probably meant 'I always visit' or 'I always go there' or 'I always take photos'. Provide a clear verb that fits the context.