Chatting— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations, and give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, so, and). Keep answers to no more than 4–5 sentences.

Exemplo: I prefer spending time alone rather than chatting with friends because I enjoy reading books and magazines. For example, on weekends I often sit in a cafe and read for a few hours, which helps me relax and think clearly.

Sugestão: Begin with a direct topic sentence, reduce filler words, and add a specific detail or short example. Use a linking word like "because" or "so" to show reason.

Exemplo: We usually talk about our work and daily life because most of us are over 25 and working. For example, we often discuss project deadlines at the office and how to balance work and family life.

Sugestão: Give a clear topic sentence without hesitations, explain the reason with a specific detail, and avoid vague phrases like "in trouble." Use linking words (because, since, so) to make it coherent.

Exemplo: I prefer talking with one friend rather than a group because I like deeper, quieter conversations. For example, when I have a personal problem I choose one close friend to discuss it calmly and get advice.

Sugestão: Make your position clear and give concrete reasons and an example. Replace hesitations with short pauses or rephrase. Keep it to 2–4 sentences and use linking words like "because" and "for example."

Exemplo: I prefer communicating via social media because it is easier to talk about personal topics or plans I find awkward to discuss face-to-face. For example, I often message friends about future travel plans before bringing them up in person.

Sugestão: Provide a concise direct answer, avoid unnecessary repetition, and explain the single incident briefly and clearly. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to clarify reasons and finish the sentence fully.

Exemplo: I rarely argue with my friends; in fact, I can remember only one disagreement. Once a friend was upset with our group for a misunderstanding, but we resolved it quickly by talking and apologizing.

× I usually prefer umm staying alone, umm thinking myself umm, And I like reading books and umm reading magazines and just I like spending time myself.

✓ I usually prefer staying alone, thinking to myself, and I like reading books and magazines; I just like spending time by myself.

The student used 'myself' and 'spending time myself' incorrectly. Use the reflexive pronoun 'myself' only when the subject and object are the same and it reflects back (e.g., 'I did it myself'). For 'think alone' the idiomatic phrase is 'thinking to myself'. For 'spend time alone' use 'spending time by myself' or 'on my own'. Also remove filler words and correct punctuation for clarity.

× Well mostly about our works or daily lives umm since we are all like over 25 umm and like most of my friends are working at their companies umm so we are talking about the jobs and works and school.

✓ Well, mostly about our work or daily lives, since we are all over 25 and most of my friends work at their companies, so we talk about jobs and school.

Use 'work' (uncountable) rather than plural 'works' when referring to employment. 'Over 25' does not need 'like'. Use present simple ('work', 'talk') for habitual actions. Replace 'we are talking' with 'we talk' to match the habitual context. Remove unnecessary fillers for clarity.

× most of my friends are working at their companies umm so we are talking about the jobs and works and school.

✓ Most of my friends work at their companies, so we talk about jobs and school.

For habitual actions use the simple present. 'Are working' suggests ongoing actions now; 'work' is correct. Also 'we are talking' should be 'we talk' for repeated actions. Ensure subject-verb agreement with plural subject 'friends' and verb 'work'.

× Of course, only one friend because umm, I'm quite umm, in trouble. So I really like talking to like smaller group, uh, than umm, than a group of people. So I wanna like, talk deeply and quietly.

✓ Of course, I prefer only one friend because I'm quite shy. I really like talking to a smaller group than a large group of people, because I want to have deep, quiet conversations.

'In trouble' is incorrect here; the student likely meant 'shy' or 'introverted'. 'Talking to like smaller group' is ungrammatical—use 'a smaller group' and compare with 'a large group'. Replace informal 'wanna' with 'want to' and reorder words for natural English. Fix punctuation and remove fillers.

× I actually prefer to communicate umm, on social media because it's easy to talk umm, about the things that I don't wanna talk in person and something about umm, what I wanna do and what I really, I don't know.

✓ I actually prefer to communicate on social media because it's easier to talk about things I don't want to discuss in person, such as what I want to do or other personal matters.

Use 'prefer to communicate on' (preposition) and 'it's easier' (comparative). Replace colloquial 'wanna' with 'want to' and 'talk in person' with 'discuss in person'. Clarify vague 'something about' to 'such as' and remove hesitations. Modal verb 'want to' is not a modal but avoid slang. Ensure parallel structure.

× I actually umm argued only once with my friends in my entire life.

✓ I actually argued with my friends only once in my life.

Place adverbs in natural positions: 'only once' fits better after the verb phrase. 'In my entire life' is wordier than 'in my life'. Use simple past 'argued' is correct for a single past event.

× Umm their friend was just mad at us but like we didn't know what happened so that's the only one. So I don't usually argue with my.

✓ One time, a friend of ours was just mad at us, but we didn't know why, so that was the only time. I don't usually argue with my friends.

The original is fragmentary and ends abruptly ('with my.'). Clarify 'their friend' to 'a friend of ours' and use 'why' instead of 'what happened' for clarity. Complete the final sentence with 'friends' to avoid a sentence fragment.