Chatting— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to make your answer more structured and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases like 'Personal experience, especially the back home.'

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy chatting with friends because it helps me feel connected to them. For example, when they have extra time, we share stories about our lives back home, which makes me very happy.

Sugestão: Improve sentence structure and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Be more specific and avoid repetition. For example, use 'We usually discuss our careers, including job roles and challenges, and also share hobbies.'

Exemplo: We usually talk about our careers, such as our current job roles and how we manage work challenges. Additionally, we share our hobbies, which helps us learn more about each other.

Sugestão: Make your answer clearer and more natural by correcting grammar and adding linking words. Explain why you prefer one-on-one conversations with specific reasons.

Exemplo: I prefer talking to just one friend because it allows for a deeper connection. Although I sometimes chat with groups, those conversations tend to be less serious.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your preference clearly. Avoid vague phrases like 'distance is a entrance' and finish your thoughts.

Exemplo: I prefer face-to-face communication because it feels more personal and helps me connect better. However, since I live in Canada and my friends are in the Philippines, I also use social media to stay in touch despite the distance.

Sugestão: Try to avoid repeating words like 'especially' and improve sentence flow with linking words. Provide a clear topic sentence and specific examples to support your answer.

Exemplo: Sometimes I argue with my friends, particularly about controversial topics like politics. Since everyone has their own opinions and freedom of speech, disagreements are natural, but we respect each other's views.

× I do like chat, chatting with friends especially when they have extra time talking to them makes my heart happy since I miss them so much and I love hearing their stories.

✓ I do like chatting with friends, especially when they have extra time. Talking to them makes my heart happy since I miss them so much and I love hearing their stories.

The phrase 'I do like chat, chatting' is incorrect because 'chat' should be in the gerund form 'chatting' to function as a noun. Also, the sentence was run-on and needed to be split for clarity.

× Personal experience, especially the back home.

✓ Personal experience, especially back home.

The phrase 'the back home' is incorrect because 'back home' does not require the definite article 'the'. Removing 'the' makes the phrase correct.

× At this age, we usually talk about our careers, what are their currently doing in their job, their job position in their role.

✓ At this age, we usually talk about our careers, what they are currently doing in their jobs, and their job positions or roles.

The original sentence has incorrect word order ('what are their currently doing') and awkward phrasing. Correcting the word order and adding conjunctions improves clarity and grammar.

× They would share their personal experience on how they handle their boss, the work itself and the people around them.

✓ They would share their personal experiences about how they handle their boss, the work itself, and the people around them.

The phrase 'personal experience on' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'about'. Also, 'experience' should be plural to match the context.

× Also, they would also share what a hobby that they're doing.

✓ Also, they would share what hobbies they are doing.

The phrase 'what a hobby that they're doing' is incorrect. 'Hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' and the sentence simplified for clarity.

× I prefer talking to just one friend because I feel more connected with her or his if we just talk individually.

✓ I prefer talking to just one friend because I feel more connected with her or him if we just talk individually.

The pronoun 'his' is incorrect here; it should be 'him' to match the object form after the preposition 'with'.

× I do sometimes talk with group of friends but sometimes it's not serious.

✓ I do sometimes talk with a group of friends, but sometimes it's not serious.

The phrase 'with group of friends' is missing the article 'a' before 'group'.

× I prefer to communicate face to face because I feel more connected with them and personal conversations.

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face because I feel more connected with them during personal conversations.

The phrase 'and personal conversations' is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'during' clarifies the relationship between feeling connected and personal conversations.

× But sometimes social media also works. For example, I live in Canada and my friends live in the Philippines so the distance is a entrance.

✓ But sometimes social media also works. For example, I live in Canada and my friends live in the Philippines, so the distance is an obstacle.

The phrase 'the distance is a entrance' is incorrect. 'Entrance' is not appropriate here; 'an obstacle' or 'a barrier' fits better. Also, 'a' should be 'an' before a vowel sound.

× But with this help.

✓ But with this help, we can stay connected.

The sentence fragment 'But with this help.' is incomplete and needs to be connected to a main clause to be grammatically correct.

× Sometimes I argue with my friends, especially when the topic is controversial, especially politics.

✓ Sometimes I argue with my friends, especially when the topic is controversial, such as politics.

Repeating 'especially' is redundant. Using 'such as' clarifies the example of a controversial topic.

× Everyone has their own opinion and we have freedoms of speech to follow, like anyone can convey their thoughts.

✓ Everyone has their own opinion and we have freedom of speech to follow, so anyone can convey their thoughts.

The phrase 'freedoms of speech' is incorrect; the correct term is 'freedom of speech'. Also, 'like' is informal and should be replaced with 'so' for clarity.