Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và ngắn gọn hơn, tránh lặp từ và tiếng đệm (uh, um). Thêm một câu hỗ trợ cụ thể (ví dụ: lí do chi tiết hoặc tần suất) và sử dụng liên từ để mạch lạc (because, so, therefore). Giữ tối đa 4-5 câu, từng câu rõ ràng.

Exemplo: I rarely go to the library because there isn't one near my neighborhood. Instead, I usually read on my tablet or phone at home, especially at night. This is more convenient for me, so I prefer digital books over visiting a library.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời nên bắt đầu trực tiếp (topic sentence) và tránh lặp/tiếng đệm. Nên mở rộng bằng một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ loại sách mượn, hoạt động làm việc) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc (for example, because).

Exemplo: I don't go to the library often, but when I do I usually borrow a few fiction or study books. For example, I go there to find a quiet place to concentrate on homework or to research topics for my studies.

Sugestão: Trả lời nên dùng thì phù hợp (past simple) và tránh tiếng đệm. Cung cấp chi tiết rõ ràng (ví dụ: loại sách bạn mượn, hoạt động cụ thể) và liên kết các ý bằng liên từ (when, because, so). Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ (I did -> I did; at around 15 -> when I was about 15).

Exemplo: Yes, I did. When I was about 15 I went to the library about three times a week because I loved reading novels and researching school projects. Although the library was small, it had a surprisingly large collection of books that I enjoyed.

Sugestão: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và tránh lặp/tiếng đệm. Nên đưa ra quan điểm rõ ràng kèm lí do cụ thể và ví dụ, sửa ngữ pháp (e.g. 'more involved with smartphones and computers, playing video games rather than reading books' và 'find a passion for reading'). Dùng liên từ (because, so) để mạch lạc.

Exemplo: I'm not sure, but I don't think many Chinese children visit libraries nowadays because they spend more time on smartphones and playing video games. I hope education and parents can encourage reading so more kids develop a passion for books.

× the library, UH usually don't open at that hours.

✓ the library usually doesn't open at that hour.

Use 'there is/are' or 'be' forms correctly. Here 'library' is singular so use the singular auxiliary 'doesn't' not 'don't'. Use 'that hour' (singular) for a specific time period. Suggestion: match subject number with auxiliary and use singular/plural for time expressions.

× Uh, yes I do. I went to the library a lot when I was out around 15.

✓ Yes, I did. I went to the library a lot when I was around 15.

The question asked about past behavior so use past tense 'did' for short answers, not present 'do'. Remove the extraneous word 'out'. Use 'around 15' to indicate approximate age. Suggestion: use past simple for past events and match short answers accordingly.

× The library is small, but they have a huge collection.

✓ The library is small, but it has a huge collection.

The subject 'the library' is singular, so the pronoun and verb should be singular: 'it has' not 'they have'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns and verbs agree in number with singular nouns.

× the kids are more involved with the smartphones and computers, play video games and reading a book.

✓ the kids are more involved with smartphones and computers, playing video games and reading books.

When listing activities after 'involved with', use parallel gerund forms: 'playing' and 'reading'. Also use plural 'books' to match general activity and drop the article before 'smartphones'. Suggestion: keep parallel structure and consistent verb forms in lists.

× But I hope that they can find a passionate about reading.

✓ But I hope that they can become passionate about reading.

'Passionate' is an adjective and cannot follow 'find a' as a noun. Use 'become passionate about' or 'develop a passion for' to express the intended meaning. Suggestion: choose correct collocations: 'become passionate about' or 'find a passion for'.