Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. Use more precise vocabulary and organize your ideas logically with linking words. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain the situation with supporting details using connectors like 'however' or 'although'.

Exemplo: Yes, as a university student, I often go to the library to study. However, sometimes it is crowded and noisy because some people talk loudly instead of studying. Despite this, I still try to focus on my work.

Sugestão: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect ideas. Be specific about your activities and explain reasons briefly.

Exemplo: I usually study in the library, but after studying for a long time, I take a short break by texting my friends on my phone to relax and refresh my mind.

Sugestão: Try to form complete sentences and avoid repetition. Provide a clear answer with supporting details and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, avoid informal phrases like 'I hate study' and use more natural expressions.

Exemplo: No, I did not go to the library when I was a child because I did not enjoy studying at that time. Instead, I preferred playing video games, and I rarely read books even when my mother encouraged me to do so.

Sugestão: Avoid unclear and fragmented sentences. Provide a clear opinion with reasons and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Use appropriate vocabulary and avoid slang or uncertain expressions like 'curious' or 'like'.

Exemplo: I don't think Chinese kids often go to the library because after school, many parents encourage them to attend extra classes to improve their academic performance and keep up with their peers.

× Some of them are just randomly talking there.

✓ Some of them just randomly talk there.

The verb 'talking' is in the present participle form, but the sentence requires the simple present tense to describe habitual actions. Using 'talk' matches the third person plural subject 'some of them' and indicates a habitual action.

× I don't know how they how they still get a good grades as.

✓ I don't know how they still get good grades.

The phrase 'a good grades' incorrectly mixes singular article 'a' with plural noun 'grades'. Removing 'a' and using 'good grades' correctly reflects the plural form.

× I usually study in library but it's not but for me like after a long time study I probably will use my phone to like text with my friend to to get a rest.

✓ I usually study in the library, but after studying for a long time, I probably use my phone to text my friend to get a rest.

The phrase 'in library' requires the definite article 'the' to specify the place. Also, 'after a long time study' should be 'after studying for a long time' to correctly use the gerund and preposition. 'Text with my friend' is better as 'text my friend' for natural phrasing. Extra words like 'but it's not but for me like' are removed for clarity.

× No, I don't think 'cause when I was young, when I was a little kid, I don't like, I don't really like study 'cause I hate study.

✓ No, I don't think so because when I was young, when I was a little kid, I didn't like studying because I hated studying.

The sentence mixes present tense verbs 'don't like' and 'hate' with past time references. To maintain tense consistency, past tense forms 'didn't like' and 'hated' should be used. Also, 'study' should be 'studying' as a gerund after 'like' and 'hate'.

× Like my hobby is only play is only playing video games at the time when every time when my mother ask me to read the book, I.

✓ My hobby was only playing video games at that time, and every time my mother asked me to read a book, I...

The phrase 'at the time when every time when' is redundant and awkward; simplifying to 'at that time' and 'every time' improves clarity. 'Ask' should be past tense 'asked' to match past context. 'Read the book' should be 'read a book' to generalize the object.

× No I don't think so. Curious. Like when Chinese kids after finishing the school the Chinese parents will force them to take another class?

✓ No, I don't think so. It's curious. Like when Chinese kids finish school, Chinese parents will force them to take another class.

The sentence fragment 'Curious.' is incomplete; adding 'It's curious.' forms a complete sentence. 'After finishing the school' should be 'finish school' for natural phrasing. The question mark is incorrect as the sentence is a statement.

× Like after class class to like study better, like to chase other students.

✓ Like after class, to study better, to catch up with other students.

The phrase 'to chase other students' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'to catch up with other students'. Also, 'after class class' repeats 'class' unnecessarily. Adding commas improves readability.