Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is generally good but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of saying 'I had to study pressure,' you can say 'I was under study pressure.' Also, try to connect your ideas more smoothly using linking words like 'because' or 'so.'

Exemplo: Yes, I often visit the library whenever I have free time because it helps me refresh my mind. For instance, a few days ago, I was feeling exhausted due to study pressure, so I went to the library near my house to relax and study.

Sugestão: Try to improve grammar and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. For example, say 'This is because' instead of 'This because.' Also, avoid saying 'my father forced me'; instead, say 'my father encouraged me.'

Exemplo: When I arrive at the library, I usually read books about history because, as a science student, I believe this knowledge will benefit me in the future. Moreover, my father encourages me to read such books to improve my academic performance.

Sugestão: Improve sentence structure and use linking words for clarity. For example, say 'This is because there was no library near my house when I was around 9 or 10 years old.' Also, avoid informal phrases like 'whenever I was like at the age of.'

Exemplo: Honestly, I never visited a library when I was a kid because there was no library near my house when I was about 9 or 10 years old. Moreover, my parents did not allow me to go outside, not even to play with my friends.

Sugestão: Work on grammar and vocabulary accuracy. For example, say 'some Chinese kids were reading' instead of 'some Chinese kid were reading.' Also, avoid vague phrases like 'they also elevated'; instead, say 'they believed.' Use linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: From my perspective, yes, Chinese kids often go to the library to improve their academic performance. For example, a few days ago, I saw on the Internet that some Chinese kids were reading history books because they believed it would be beneficial for their future.

× I tend to visit the library whenever I get free time.

✓ I tend to visit the library whenever I get free time.

No correction needed here as 'get free time' is acceptable in informal speech, but 'have free time' is more standard. However, since it is not listed as a grammar problem type, no change is made.

× Then I visited the library which is located beside my house.

✓ Then I visited the library which is located beside my house.

No correction needed; 'beside' is correctly used here to indicate location next to the house.

× After arriving the library, I tend to read some books about history.

✓ After arriving at the library, I tend to read some books about history.

The verb 'arrive' requires the preposition 'at' when referring to a place. So, 'arriving the library' is incorrect; it should be 'arriving at the library'.

× This because as a student of science, I strongly believe that it can be beneficial for me in the upcoming years.

✓ This is because, as a student of science, I strongly believe that it can be beneficial for me in the upcoming years.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'This'. The phrase 'This because' is incomplete and should be 'This is because' to form a correct sentence.

× Moreover, my father also forced me to read this type of books to enhance my academic performance.

✓ Moreover, my father also forced me to read this type of book to enhance my academic performance.

'Type of' is followed by a singular noun when referring to a category. Therefore, 'this type of books' should be 'this type of book'.

× Honestly not. I had never visited any library when I was a kid.

✓ Honestly, no. I had never visited any library when I was a kid.

'Honestly not' is not a correct phrase. The correct expression is 'Honestly, no' to negate the question politely.

× This because there was not any library beside my house whenever I was like at the age of 9 or 10.

✓ This is because there was not any library beside my house when I was about 9 or 10 years old.

'This because' is incomplete and should be 'This is because'. Also, 'whenever I was like at the age of 9 or 10' is awkward; 'when I was about 9 or 10 years old' is more natural.

× Moreover, my parents did not allow me to go outside, not even to play with my friends.

✓ Moreover, my parents did not allow me to go outside, not even to play with my friends.

No correction needed; the preposition 'to' is correctly used here.

× From my perspective, yes, Chinese kids often go to the library, maybe in order to enhance their academic performance.

✓ From my perspective, yes, Chinese kids often go to the library, maybe in order to enhance their academic performance.

No correction needed; 'kids' and 'their' are correctly plural.

× To illustrate, a few days ago I observed on the Internet that some Chinese kid were reading some books about history, and they also elevated that it can be advantageous for the upcoming years.

✓ To illustrate, a few days ago I observed on the Internet that some Chinese kids were reading some books about history, and they also believed that it can be advantageous for the upcoming years.

'Some Chinese kid were' is incorrect because 'kid' is singular and 'were' is plural. It should be 'some Chinese kids were'. Also, 'elevated' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'believed'.