Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and provides reasons, but it is a bit long and slightly unclear in parts. Try to make your sentences more concise and correct minor grammar issues. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, I often go to the library because I need to gather information for my assignments and presentations. Additionally, I enjoy reading various articles there to broaden my knowledge. The quiet atmosphere also helps me focus better.

Sugestão: Your answer is understandable but contains many fillers and repetitions. Try to avoid using 'uh' and 'umm' and be more direct. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details.

Exemplo: Usually, I read books in the library. Sometimes, I go there simply to find peace and calm my mind after a hectic day. The quiet environment helps me relax and focus.

Sugestão: Your answer is detailed but a bit informal and includes fillers. Try to organize your ideas clearly and avoid unnecessary words. Use linking words to improve coherence.

Exemplo: Yes, I used to go to the library with my class when I was a kid. However, we did not know how to choose books properly, so we mostly had fun and chatted before returning to class.

Sugestão: Your answer shows honesty but lacks clarity and contains some errors. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases like 'this dress'. Try to give a clear opinion with reasons and use linking words.

Exemplo: I am not sure if Chinese kids often go to the library. However, I believe visiting the library is important, not only for reading books but also to relax and calm the mind.

× Definitely yes, as I'm a student so I need to gather information and I read various books and magazines to do my assignments and presentation.

✓ Definitely yes, as I'm a student, I need to gather information and read various books and magazines to do my assignments and presentations.

The original sentence incorrectly uses both 'as' and 'so' together, which is redundant. Also, 'presentation' should be plural to match 'assignments'. The corrected sentence removes 'so' and adds a comma after 'student' for clarity, and changes 'presentation' to 'presentations' to agree in number with 'assignments'.

× Moreover, I also go to the library for reading some other articles to broaden my knowledge apart from it the atmosphere.

✓ Moreover, I also go to the library to read some other articles to broaden my knowledge apart from the atmosphere.

The phrase 'for reading' is better expressed as 'to read' to indicate purpose. The phrase 'apart from it the atmosphere' is unclear and likely incorrect; it should be 'apart from the atmosphere' to make sense. The correction clarifies the intended meaning.

× What I usually do is uh to read books umm sometime I just go there for having peace in my mind and I want to remind myself from the hectic day.

✓ What I usually do is uh to read books. Umm, sometimes I just go there to have peace of mind and to remind myself after a hectic day.

The phrase 'for having peace in my mind' is incorrect; 'to have peace of mind' is the correct expression. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. 'Remind myself from the hectic day' is incorrect; it should be 'remind myself after a hectic day' to indicate time reference. The correction addresses these issues for clarity and correctness.

× Umm I would also say that I go to the library to calm my mind.

✓ Umm, I would also say that I go to the library to calm my mind.

A comma after 'Umm' improves readability. The rest of the sentence is correct.

× Definitely, yes. I vividly remember when I was a kid, uh, we used to go to the library with our class in charge, but at that time we did not know anything like how to read books properly, which books are good for our knowledge.

✓ Definitely, yes. I vividly remember when I was a kid, uh, we used to go to the library with our class in charge, but at that time we did not know anything, like how to read books properly or which books were good for our knowledge.

The phrase 'which books are good' should be in past tense 'which books were good' to maintain tense consistency with 'did not know'. Also, adding 'or' improves sentence flow.

× So we just did lots of fun and frolic there and gossip with each other and return to the class.

✓ So we just had lots of fun and frolic there, gossiped with each other, and returned to the class.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'did lots of fun' which is ungrammatical; the correct expression is 'had lots of fun'. Also, the verbs 'gossip' and 'return' should be in past tense 'gossiped' and 'returned' to maintain tense consistency. The correction improves sentence structure and verb tense agreement.

× Well, this is very difficult question for me.

✓ Well, this is a very difficult question for me.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'very difficult question'. Adding 'a' corrects the article usage.

× Umm, I would say I don't know exactly that Chinese kids go to library or not, but according to me it is very important to go to library not for reading books or novels, but also for this dress or calm your mind.

✓ Umm, I would say I don't know exactly whether Chinese kids go to the library or not, but according to me, it is very important to go to the library not only for reading books or novels, but also to de-stress or calm your mind.

The phrase 'go to library' needs the definite article 'the' before 'library'. 'Don't know exactly that' should be 'don't know exactly whether' to introduce a yes/no clause. 'According to me' is better expressed as 'in my opinion' or 'according to me' with a comma. 'Not for reading books or novels, but also for this dress or calm your mind' is incorrect; it should be 'not only for reading books or novels, but also to de-stress or calm your mind'. 'This dress' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'de-stress'. The correction addresses these issues for clarity and correctness.