Library— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Try to avoid redundancy and irrelevant information. Focus on answering the question directly with clear and natural sentences. For example, avoid repeating words and unrelated details like mentioning 'Red Bulls' which does not relate to the question.

Exemplo: Yes, I often visit the library because it provides a quiet environment where I can concentrate on reading and studying without distractions.

Sugestão: Avoid repeating words and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Be specific about what you do and organise your answer logically. For example, use linking words like 'firstly', 'also', or 'in addition' to connect ideas.

Exemplo: In the library, I usually read books and work on group projects with my friends. Additionally, I search for useful digital resources to support my studies.

Sugestão: Try to avoid repeating words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, use 'because' to explain reasons and avoid filler words like 'like'.

Exemplo: When I was a kid, I didn't go to the library because my parents provided me with a personal space at home and bought many books for me to read and learn from.

Sugestão: Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use clear and precise language to express your ideas. Also, organise your answer logically with linking words. For example, explain reasons clearly and avoid vague expressions.

Exemplo: I think many Chinese kids often go to the library to study together in groups and to enjoy reading books, including subjects like mathematics.

× Yes, I'm often visit the library to read books and study my my lessons.

✓ Yes, I often visit the library to read books and study my lessons.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I'm' (I am) with the verb 'visit'. In present simple tense for habitual actions, we use the base verb without 'am'. The correct form is 'I often visit'. Also, the repeated 'my' is a typographical error.

× And additionally I really love Red Bulls.

✓ Additionally, I really love Red Bulls.

Starting a sentence with 'And additionally' is redundant and awkward. 'Additionally' alone is sufficient to add information. Also, a comma after 'Additionally' improves clarity.

× And I usually read books and and do the lessons with my friends, like a group project.

✓ I usually read books and do lessons with my friends, like a group project.

Starting the sentence with 'And' is unnecessary and the repeated 'and' is a typographical error. Removing the initial 'And' and the duplicate 'and' improves sentence flow.

× And also I'm trying to find the resources like a digital media that are really quite useful for my study.

✓ I am also trying to find resources like digital media that are really quite useful for my study.

The phrase 'like a digital media' is incorrect because 'media' is plural and does not need the article 'a'. Also, starting with 'And also' is redundant; 'I am also' is clearer.

× And also I'm trying to focus on the read many and other books together.

✓ I am also trying to focus on reading many other books together.

The phrase 'focus on the read many and other books' is incorrect. The verb after 'focus on' should be in the -ing form ('reading'). Also, 'And also' at the start is redundant and should be removed.

× When I was a kid I didn't go to the library because in my home I have my own space to to read my books.

✓ When I was a kid, I didn't go to the library because at home I had my own space to read my books.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the time is past ('When I was a kid'), 'have' should be 'had'. Also, 'in my home' is better expressed as 'at home'. The repeated 'to' is a typographical error.

× Like my parents gave me like a own space and bought many books to read, to read and learn and and to broaden my knowledge.

✓ My parents gave me my own space and bought many books to read, learn, and broaden my knowledge.

The phrase 'like a own space' is incorrect; it should be 'my own space'. The repeated 'to read' and 'and and' are errors. Also, 'Like' at the start is unnecessary and should be removed.

× I think in some Chinese kids often go to the library because they would like to have fun with friends and then focus on study as a project group, project group and also like read and have came with like a mathematics or something for like a part.

✓ I think some Chinese kids often go to the library because they would like to have fun with friends and then focus on study as a project group, and also like to read and do mathematics or something similar as part of it.

The phrase 'in some Chinese kids' is incorrect; 'some Chinese kids' is correct. 'Have came' is incorrect; it should be 'do' or 'work on'. The sentence is also repetitive and unclear, so restructuring improves clarity.