Part 1
Examinador
Do you often go to the library?
Candidato
Yes, I frequently go to the library in order to write my graduation paper. I need to go to the library so many times to search the books.
Examinador
What do you usually do in the library?
Candidato
In recent days, I usually use the library as the place for reading the books. For three years ago, when I was a high school student, I used the library as a place for study, but for now I used for the reading books.
Examinador
Did you go to the library when you were a kid?
Candidato
Yes, I did because my father loves to read the books and I affected him and I go to the library so many times, so I love to read the books in the library.
Examinador
Do Chinese kids often go to the library?
Candidato
Yes, as far as I know they go to the library so many times because Chinese people have a strong emphasis on education and studying hard. Many students spend a lot of time reading and preparing for exam in the quiet place like library.
Do you often go to the library?
Pontuação: 70.0Sugestão: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、表現がやや不自然で冗長です。"so many times"の代わりに"often"や"frequently"を使い、文を簡潔にしましょう。また、接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより自然になります。
Exemplo: Yes, I often go to the library to write my graduation paper because I need to search for many books there.
What do you usually do in the library?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 時制の使い方に誤りがあり、文の構造も不自然です。"For three years ago"は"Three years ago"に修正し、現在形と過去形を正しく使い分けましょう。また、接続詞を使って文をつなげると流れが良くなります。
Exemplo: Recently, I usually use the library to read books. However, three years ago when I was a high school student, I used it mainly as a place to study.
Did you go to the library when you were a kid?
Pontuação: 55.0Sugestão: "I affected him"は意味が不明瞭で、正しくは"I was influenced by him"です。また、時制の一貫性を保ち、冗長な表現を避けましょう。
Exemplo: Yes, I did. My father loves reading books, and I was influenced by him. I often went to the library and developed a love for reading there.
Do Chinese kids often go to the library?
Pontuação: 75.0Sugestão: "so many times"は不自然なので、"often"や"frequently"に置き換えましょう。また、"preparing for exam"は"preparing for exams"と複数形にし、冠詞"the"を"a"に変えると自然です。
Exemplo: Yes, as far as I know, Chinese kids often go to the library because education is highly valued. Many students spend a lot of time reading and preparing for exams in quiet places like libraries.
× I need to go to the library so many times to search the books.
✓ I need to go to the library many times to search for books.
'So many times' is less natural in this context; 'many times' is more appropriate. Also, 'search the books' should be 'search for books' because 'search for' is the correct prepositional phrase when looking for something.
× I need to go to the library so many times to search the books.
✓ I need to go to the library many times to search for books.
The verb 'search' requires the preposition 'for' when indicating the object being looked for, so 'search the books' should be 'search for books'.
× In recent days, I usually use the library as the place for reading the books.
✓ Recently, I usually use the library as a place to read books.
'In recent days' is awkward; 'Recently' is more natural. 'As the place for reading the books' should be 'as a place to read books' because 'a place' is more general and 'to read' is the correct infinitive form here. Also, 'the books' is too specific; 'books' is better.
× For three years ago, when I was a high school student, I used the library as a place for study, but for now I used for the reading books.
✓ Three years ago, when I was a high school student, I used the library as a place to study, but now I use it for reading books.
'For three years ago' is incorrect; 'Three years ago' is correct. 'A place for study' should be 'a place to study' using the infinitive. 'For now I used' is wrong tense; it should be 'now I use'. Also, 'used for the reading books' is incorrect; it should be 'use it for reading books'.
× For three years ago, when I was a high school student, I used the library as a place for study, but for now I used for the reading books.
✓ Three years ago, when I was a high school student, I used the library as a place to study, but now I use it for reading books.
The phrase 'for now I used' incorrectly uses past tense for a current action; it should be present tense 'now I use'.
× For three years ago, when I was a high school student, I used the library as a place for study, but for now I used for the reading books.
✓ Three years ago, when I was a high school student, I used the library as a place to study, but now I use it for reading books.
The phrase 'used for the reading books' is incorrect; it should be 'use it for reading books' without 'the' before 'reading books' and including the pronoun 'it'.
× Yes, I did because my father loves to read the books and I affected him and I go to the library so many times, so I love to read the books in the library.
✓ Yes, I did because my father loves to read books and I was influenced by him and I went to the library many times, so I love to read books in the library.
'I affected him' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I was influenced by him'. 'I go' should be past tense 'I went' to match the past context. 'So many times' is better as 'many times'. Also, 'the books' should be 'books'.
× Yes, I did because my father loves to read the books and I affected him and I go to the library so many times, so I love to read the books in the library.
✓ Yes, I did because my father loves to read books and I was influenced by him and I went to the library many times, so I love to read books in the library.
'So many times' is less natural; 'many times' is preferred. Also, 'the books' is too specific; 'books' is more natural here.
× Many students spend a lot of time reading and preparing for exam in the quiet place like library.
✓ Many students spend a lot of time reading and preparing for exams in quiet places like libraries.
'Preparing for exam' should be 'preparing for exams' (plural). 'In the quiet place like library' should be 'in quiet places like libraries' to match plural and remove unnecessary articles.