Part 1
Examinador
Do you make a list when you shop?
Candidato
I do not make list when I shop. On the one hand, I will remember all the things I want to buy in my brain. Therefore, when I go shopping, I will buy what I need. Quickly. On the other hand, I think make a list is a waste of the time.
Examinador
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Candidato
I do not make a list for my work, why? Work for my quiz or essay. I will do do them quickly as I can. However, my friends always make a list and she always gets gets high grades. So I think this measure is effective.
Examinador
Why don't some people like making lists?
Candidato
I will take myself as an example first making this is a waste of time when I need to make a list, I will spend a lot of time to write what I should do. Therefore, I will have less of time to do my homework or essay.
Examinador
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Candidato
The reason why I prefer to make list on my phone. As follows. First, I think. I use phones. I spend time on using phones. More than using paper. Second, I think. Feng is more useful to.
Do you make a list when you shop?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 你的回答有些语法错误,且表达不够自然。建议使用完整句子,避免重复和断句不连贯的问题。同时,回答时可以更具体地说明为什么不喜欢列购物清单。
Exemplo: I usually don't make a list when I shop because I prefer to remember the items I need. This way, I can shop quickly without spending extra time writing a list.
Do you make a list for your work? Does it work?
Pontuação: 55.0Sugestão: 回答中有语法错误和重复词汇,表达不够清晰。建议直接回答问题,并用连词连接观点,说明自己不做清单的原因和朋友做清单的效果。
Exemplo: I don't usually make a list for my work because I try to finish quizzes and essays quickly. However, I know my friend makes lists and gets high grades, so I think making lists can be effective.
Why don't some people like making lists?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 回答结构不够清晰,语法错误较多。建议先给出主题句,然后用具体原因支持,并使用连接词使表达更连贯。
Exemplo: Some people, like me, don't like making lists because it takes too much time to write everything down. As a result, they have less time to complete their actual tasks.
Do you prefer to make a list on paper or your phone?
Pontuação: 50.0Sugestão: 回答不完整且表达不清晰。建议用完整句子说明偏好,并具体说明手机列清单的优点,避免断句和不连贯。
Exemplo: I prefer to make lists on my phone because I use it more often than paper. Also, phone apps are more convenient and help me organize my tasks better.
× I do not make list when I shop.
✓ I do not make a list when I shop.
这里缺少冠词“a”,因为“list”是可数名词,单数形式前需要加冠词。
× I think make a list is a waste of the time.
✓ I think making a list is a waste of time.
“make a list”应改为动名词短语“making a list”作主语;“the time”应改为“time”,表示泛指时间,不需要定冠词。
× I do not make a list for my work, why? Work for my quiz or essay.
✓ I do not make a list for my work, why? Work for my quizzes or essays.
“quiz”和“essay”应使用复数形式“quizzes”和“essays”,因为这里指的是多次测验或多篇文章。
× I will do do them quickly as I can.
✓ I will do them as quickly as I can.
“do do”是重复错误,应去掉一个“do”;“quickly”应放在“as”后形成固定结构“as quickly as”。
× my friends always make a list and she always gets gets high grades.
✓ My friend always makes a list and she always gets high grades.
“friends”应改为单数“friend”与后文“she”保持一致;“gets gets”重复,应去掉一个“gets”;“makes”第三人称单数形式。
× I will take myself as an example first making this is a waste of time when I need to make a list, I will spend a lot of time to write what I should do.
✓ I will take myself as an example. First, making a list is a waste of time. When I need to make a list, I will spend a lot of time writing what I should do.
原句结构混乱,应拆分为多个句子;“making this is a waste of time”应改为“making a list is a waste of time”;“spend a lot of time to write”应改为“spend a lot of time writing”,动词后接动名词。
× Therefore, I will have less of time to do my homework or essay.
✓ Therefore, I will have less time to do my homework or essays.
“less of time”应改为“less time”;“essay”应改为复数“essays”,与“homework”并列。
× The reason why I prefer to make list on my phone.
✓ The reason why I prefer to make a list on my phone.
“list”是可数名词,单数形式前需要加冠词“a”。
× The reason why I prefer to make list on my phone. As follows.
✓ The reason why I prefer to make a list on my phone is as follows.
原句断句错误,应合并为完整句子,主语和谓语缺失。
× First, I think. I use phones. I spend time on using phones. More than using paper.
✓ First, I think I use my phone and spend more time using it than using paper.
原句断句不当,应合并为完整句子;“phones”应为单数“phone”;“spend time on using phones”表达不自然,应改为“spend more time using it”。
× Second, I think. Feng is more useful to.
✓ Second, I think Feng is more useful too.
“to”应为“too”,表示“也”;句子断句错误,应合并为完整句子。