Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to make it more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, instead of listing items abruptly, you can say 'I am interested in how songs are created, including composing, lyrics, and the tones and pitch used to make a perfect song.'

Exemplo: I'm not very fond of singing myself; however, I find the process of creating songs fascinating, such as composing the melody, writing meaningful lyrics, and choosing the right tones and pitch to make the song perfect.

Sugestão: Your answer is well-structured and provides good reasons. To improve, try to use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to make your answer more coherent. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas; instead, focus on specific details about your feelings or experiences.

Exemplo: No, I have never learned to sing because, as an introverted person, I lack the confidence to perform publicly. However, I enjoy listening to various types of music, which helps me appreciate the art even more.

Sugestão: Your answer is heartfelt and specific. To enhance it, try to use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, simplify some phrases for naturalness, for example, use 'efforts' instead of 'endeavours'.

Exemplo: If I ever sing a song, I would dedicate it to my mother because I truly appreciate all the hardships and efforts she made to raise us and provide for our needs.

Sugestão: Your answer is relevant and includes a personal example, which is good. To improve, use linking words like 'for instance' or 'such as' to introduce examples. Also, try to connect your ideas more clearly by explaining how singing and dancing help with happiness and relaxation.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe singing and other forms of art can bring happiness and relaxation to people. For instance, I enjoy dancing, and whenever I feel anxious, performing classical or pop dances helps me feel calm and joyful.

× I'm not really fond of singing, but I really am interested in the way all the work is done, For example the composing of the songs, the lyrics and even the tones and pitch that are considered for making a perfect song.

✓ I'm not really fond of singing, but I am really interested in how all the work is done. For example, the composing of songs, the lyrics, and even the tones and pitch considered in making a perfect song.

The phrase 'interested in the way all the work is done' is better expressed as 'interested in how all the work is done' for naturalness. Also, 'the composing of the songs' should be 'the composing of songs' because 'songs' is plural and general here. The sentence was a run-on and needed to be split for clarity. 'For example' should be followed by a comma. These changes improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× No, I have never learned how to sing because as an introverted person, I did not have enough confidence and courage to perform in front of the public.

✓ No, I have never learned how to sing because, as an introverted person, I did not have enough confidence and courage to perform in front of the public.

A comma is needed after 'because' to separate the clause for better readability. The past tense 'did not have' is correct here because it refers to a past state. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× I think if I ever have to sing a song, I will surely dedicate it to my mother because I really appreciate how she had to go through all the hardships and endeavours to nurture us and to provide us with all the necessities.

✓ I think if I ever have to sing a song, I will surely dedicate it to my mother because I really appreciate how she went through all the hardships and endeavours to nurture us and provide us with all the necessities.

The phrase 'had to go through' is grammatically correct but 'went through' is more natural and direct in this context. Also, 'to provide us with all the necessities' is better without the second 'to' for parallelism. These changes improve the sentence's flow and clarity.

× Yes, I think singing and other sorts of art really help people to be happy and relaxed.

✓ Yes, I think singing and other forms of art really help people be happy and relaxed.

The phrase 'other sorts of art' is better expressed as 'other forms of art' for naturalness. Also, 'help people to be happy' is better as 'help people be happy' because 'help' is often followed by the bare infinitive without 'to'. These changes improve naturalness and correctness.