Part 1
Examinador
Do you like singing? Why?
Candidato
No I don't like singing because I'm a tone deaf and when I think I sing well the recording doesn't say so This make me feel frustrated. Also sometimes I can feel my friends struggling to not laugh when I am singing and this also make me feel.
Examinador
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
Candidato
Yes, I only learned how to sing in the music class of primary school. At that time I thought I sing really well but I my dad's mate was struggling not to laugh and I feel embarrassed on both me and him.
Examinador
Who do you want to sing for?
Candidato
I think as a tone deaf person I should probably sing for the person who I hate, but I think I might practice in the future and trying to sing well to sing for my mother because I love her and she wants me to sing.
Examinador
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
Candidato
Yes, things bring happiness for both the singer and the listener. For the singer, they can feel relaxed and leave everything unhappy behind. As for me, although I'm not guessing, I feel relieved when I am singing.
Do you like singing? Why?
Pontuação: 65.0Sugestão: 你的回答表达了观点,但语法和用词不够准确,句子结构较为混乱,且缺少连贯的连接词。建议注意时态一致性,使用更准确的词汇,并用连接词使句子更流畅。
Exemplo: No, I don't like singing because I am tone deaf. When I listen to my recordings, they don't sound good, which makes me feel frustrated. Also, sometimes my friends try not to laugh when I sing, and that makes me feel embarrassed.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
Pontuação: 60.0Sugestão: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题,句子结构不完整。建议使用正确的时态和句型,表达更清晰,并使用连接词使内容连贯。
Exemplo: Yes, I learned how to sing only in primary school music class. At that time, I thought I sang well, but my dad's friend tried not to laugh, which made me feel embarrassed for both of us.
Who do you want to sing for?
Pontuação: 70.0Sugestão: 回答表达了想法,但句子较长且结构不够清晰。建议分句表达,注意语法和时态一致,使用连接词使句子更自然。
Exemplo: As a tone deaf person, I probably shouldn't sing for people I dislike. However, I want to practice singing in the future so I can sing well for my mother because I love her and she wants me to sing.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
Pontuação: 75.0Sugestão: 回答内容较好,但有语法错误和表达不清的地方。建议使用更准确的词汇和句型,避免模糊表达,增强逻辑连贯性。
Exemplo: Yes, singing can bring happiness to both the singer and the listener. For the singer, it helps to relax and forget unhappy things. For me, even though I am not a good singer, I feel relieved when I sing.
× No I don't like singing because I'm a tone deaf and when I think I sing well the recording doesn't say so This make me feel frustrated.
✓ No, I don't like singing because I'm tone deaf and when I think I sing well, the recording doesn't say so. This makes me feel frustrated.
这里的'tone deaf'前不需要冠词'a',因为'tone deaf'是形容词短语,表示状态。'This make me'中的'make'应为第三人称单数形式'makes',因为主语是单数的'This'。
× Also sometimes I can feel my friends struggling to not laugh when I am singing and this also make me feel.
✓ Also, sometimes I can feel my friends struggling not to laugh when I am singing, and this also makes me feel bad.
'struggling to not laugh'应改为'struggling not to laugh',不定式的否定应放在'to'之后。'this also make me'中的'make'应为第三人称单数'makes'。句尾缺少宾语,补充'feel bad'使句子完整。
× Yes, I only learned how to sing in the music class of primary school.
✓ Yes, I only learned how to sing in the music class in primary school.
'in the music class of primary school'表达不自然,改为'in the music class in primary school'更符合英语习惯。
× At that time I thought I sing really well but I my dad's mate was struggling not to laugh and I feel embarrassed on both me and him.
✓ At that time, I thought I sang really well, but my dad's mate was struggling not to laugh and I felt embarrassed for both him and me.
'I thought I sing'应为过去时态'sang',因为描述过去的情况。'I feel embarrassed'应为过去时态'felt'。'embarrassed on both me and him'应改为'embarrassed for both him and me',介词用法错误且人称顺序调整。
× I think as a tone deaf person I should probably sing for the person who I hate, but I think I might practice in the future and trying to sing well to sing for my mother because I love her and she wants me to sing.
✓ I think as a tone deaf person, I should probably sing for the person who I hate, but I think I might practice in the future and try to sing well to sing for my mother because I love her and she wants me to sing.
'I might practice in the future and trying to sing well'中,'trying'应改为动词原形'try',因为前面有情态动词'might',后面动词应为原形。
× Yes, things bring happiness for both the singer and the listener.
✓ Yes, singing brings happiness to both the singer and the listener.
'things bring happiness'不够具体,改为'singing brings happiness'更符合语境。'bring'应改为第三人称单数形式'brings',因为主语是单数的'singing'。
× For the singer, they can feel relaxed and leave everything unhappy behind.
✓ For the singer, they can feel relaxed and leave all unhappiness behind.
'leave everything unhappy behind'表达不自然,'unhappy'是形容词,需用名词'unhappiness'。'everything unhappy'应改为'all unhappiness'。
× As for me, although I'm not guessing, I feel relieved when I am singing.
✓ As for me, although I'm not a good singer, I feel relieved when I am singing.
'I'm not guessing'语义不明,可能想表达'我不是唱得好',应改为'I'm not a good singer'。