Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Your answer shows enthusiasm but lacks clarity and natural phrasing. Try to use simpler, clearer sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, organize your ideas logically with linking words. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then explain why you like singing with specific reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel hopeful and happy. It depends on my mood, and I usually sing when I have free time in a quiet place. Singing allows me to express my feelings and relax my mind.

Sugestão: Your answer is somewhat confusing and lacks clear structure. Focus on giving a direct answer first, then add specific details. Avoid unclear phrases and try to use correct vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Exemplo: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a child. I also learned to play instruments like the harmonium and tabla. Additionally, I participated in group singing and drama performances, which I really enjoyed.

Sugestão: Your answer is unclear and contains awkward phrases like 'self pleasuring.' Try to express your ideas more naturally and clearly. Use simple sentences and avoid filler words. Also, provide specific examples to support your answer.

Exemplo: I like to sing for myself because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Whenever I have free time, I sing alone in my room or when I am with friends. Singing helps me express my feelings.

Sugestão: Your answer is good but could be clearer and more natural. Avoid awkward phrases like 'charms our mind' and 'inner body language.' Use linking words to organize your ideas and provide specific examples or reasons.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people express their emotions. Different songs suit different moods, so people choose songs that match how they feel. Singing allows them to share their feelings, which can make them feel better.

× I like singing because it's the power of hope and it refers our mind and makes us happy.

✓ I like singing because it's the power of hope, it refreshes our mind, and makes us happy.

The original sentence uses 'refers' incorrectly; the intended verb is 'refreshes' which fits the context. Also, the sentence structure needed commas to separate ideas clearly.

× But the singing depends on about the mood and it needs a required time and require an advert environment and singing really expresses our mind and relax our brain.

✓ But singing depends on the mood, it needs a required time and requires an appropriate environment, and singing really expresses our mind and relaxes our brain.

The phrase 'depends on about the mood' is incorrect; 'depends on the mood' is correct. 'Require an advert environment' is incorrect; it should be 'requires an appropriate environment'. Also, subject-verb agreement needed correction ('singing... relaxes').

× In my childhood, I have learned how to sing and I have learned to use the harmonium and the tabla in our Bangalore language and and drama too.

✓ In my childhood, I learned how to sing and to use the harmonium and the tabla in our Bangalore language and drama too.

The present perfect tense 'have learned' is not appropriate with a specific past time 'in my childhood'; simple past 'learned' is correct here.

× And it's really beautiful that time there was and I really like to learn that sunglass and I, we have learned various kind of songs in a GroupWise section and we have participated with various songs.

✓ It was really beautiful at that time, and I really liked learning that song. We learned various kinds of songs in a group-wise section and participated with various songs.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Corrected for clarity, verb tense consistency, and proper plural forms ('kinds of songs').

× Actually, I want to sing for myself because singing is kind of, uh, self pleasuring.

✓ Actually, I want to sing for myself because singing is kind of, uh, self-pleasuring.

The phrase 'self pleasuring' should be hyphenated as 'self-pleasuring' to function as a compound adjective or noun phrase.

× And basically when I get enough time, I sing alone or when I'm at the room or who am I hanging out in other places Every time I sing in my open mind or in, in my.

✓ Basically, when I get enough time, I sing alone, whether I'm in my room or hanging out in other places. Every time, I sing with an open mind.

The original sentence has pronoun misuse ('who am I hanging out') and incomplete phrases. Corrected for pronoun clarity and sentence completeness.

× Absolutely, singing can bring happiness to the people because it charms our mind and makes us happy.

✓ Absolutely, singing can bring happiness to people because it charms our minds and makes us happy.

The phrase 'bring happiness to the people' is better as 'bring happiness to people' for generalization. Also, 'our mind' should be plural 'our minds' to match the plural subject.

× By the way, there are various types of songs and it depends on the mood what type of sing song they want to sing.

✓ By the way, there are various types of songs, and it depends on the mood what type of song they want to sing.

The phrase 'sing song' is incorrect; it should be 'song'. Also, a comma is added for clarity.

× So definitely a person when they sing, they try to express their inner body language and inner voice and it makes them happy and also sad.

✓ So definitely, when a person sings, they try to express their inner body language and inner voice, and it makes them happy and sometimes sad.

The original sentence had awkward phrasing. Corrected for subject-verb agreement and clarity, and added 'sometimes' for natural expression.