Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, tetapi ada beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa dan pengulangan kata yang membuat jawaban kurang alami. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih ringkas dan jelas, serta gunakan variasi kata untuk menghindari pengulangan. Misalnya, gunakan kata 'relax' dan 'express myself' dengan cara yang lebih terstruktur dan hindari pengulangan kata 'I do like singing'.

Exemplo: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a busy week and allows me to express my emotions. Singing makes me feel happy and refreshed.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Selain itu, struktur kalimatnya kurang baik dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk menjawab dengan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan jelas, serta gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide. Hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'we, we, we'.

Exemplo: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was 17 in Senior High School. I joined the choir club where we were taught techniques to become better singers, and I really enjoyed the experience.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda sudah mengandung ide yang baik, tetapi kalimatnya kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta gunakan linking words untuk menghubungkan ide. Hindari penggunaan kata yang tidak perlu seperti 'umm' dan perbaiki struktur kalimat agar lebih natural.

Exemplo: I usually sing for myself because singing helps me express my feelings. I don't perform for others, but I believe that when I sing happily, it can also make others feel happy.

Sugestão: Jawaban Anda mengandung ide yang bagus, tetapi kalimatnya kurang terstruktur dan ada pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Cobalah untuk menggunakan kalimat yang lebih jelas dan gunakan linking words untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren. Perhatikan juga tata bahasa dan hindari pengulangan kata seperti 'happy' berulang kali.

Exemplo: In my opinion, singing can bring happiness to people because the rhythm and lyrics can uplift their mood. When we sing with a joyful attitude, that happiness can spread to others as well.

× Sometimes I go to the character room with my friends because it helps me relax, uh, for a week.

✓ Sometimes I go to the character room with my friends because it helps me relax for a week.

The phrase 'uh' is an interjection and should be omitted in formal or corrected speech to improve clarity and fluency.

× I do like singing not only for relax but also for expressing myself.

✓ I do like singing not only to relax but also to express myself.

The verb 'like' is followed by the infinitive form 'to relax' and 'to express' rather than the noun 'relax'. Using 'to' + verb is correct here.

× I joined for chore students in my school there.

✓ I joined the choir for students in my school there.

The phrase 'joined for chore students' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'joined the choir', and 'choir' is the correct noun. 'For students' clarifies the group.

× We, we, we, we teach it for how to be a good singer.

✓ We were taught how to be good singers.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. The correct passive form 'were taught' is used to indicate receiving instruction. 'How to be good singers' is the correct phrase.

× I was. I was 17 years old back then and I do love it.

✓ I was 17 years old back then and I loved it.

The phrase 'I do love it' is present tense and inconsistent with the past time reference 'back then'. It should be past tense 'I loved it'.

× I personally sing for myself because I think singing is for expressing myself.

✓ I personally sing for myself because I think singing is to express myself.

The phrase 'singing is for expressing' is awkward. The correct form is 'singing is to express' to indicate purpose.

× I never address my song for some people because they believe when I was when I singing that's mean I am happy and they become a happy person too.

✓ I never dedicate my songs to anyone because they believe when I am singing it means I am happy and they become happy too.

The phrase 'address my song for some people' is incorrect; 'dedicate my songs to anyone' is correct. Also, tense and structure are corrected for clarity and grammar.

× In my point of view, singing can bring happiness to people with the rhythm, with the lyric, and people can follow us who sing to become happy too.

✓ In my point of view, singing can bring happiness to people through the rhythm and the lyrics, and people who sing along can become happy too.

The preposition 'with' is incorrectly used; 'through' is better to express the means. 'Lyric' should be plural 'lyrics'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× And happy happiness is spread to the people when we deliver the song with happy mood and happy.

✓ And happiness is spread to people when we deliver the song with a happy mood and feeling happy.

The phrase 'happy happiness' is redundant. 'Happy mood' needs an article 'a'. The last 'and happy' is incomplete and corrected to 'feeling happy' for clarity.