Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như cách dùng từ chưa chính xác, ví dụ như 'I believe I have put some potential' và 'I'm just listening every to improve my skill'. Bạn nên trả lời ngắn gọn, rõ ràng, sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản và chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Although I'm not a professional, I often listen to my favorite songs and try to sing along to improve my skills.

Sugestão: Bạn nên tránh dùng các cụm từ không chính xác như 'it's not my potential about it' và 'I give up to become a singer'. Hãy sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và chính xác hơn để truyền đạt ý tưởng. Ngoài ra, nên thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: No, I have never taken singing lessons because they are expensive and I can't afford them. Also, I see singing as a hobby rather than a talent, so I decided not to pursue it professionally.

Sugestão: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'there's hard work for me' và 'I have a lot of person around me'. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và thêm các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Exemplo: I would like to sing for my family because they always support and encourage me. Singing for them makes me feel proud and happy, especially when they appreciate my efforts.

Sugestão: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ như 'singing an can' và 'so few more cheerful singing' là không chính xác. Hãy trả lời rõ ràng, mạch lạc, sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời có tính logic và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp.

Exemplo: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to many people. For example, listening to cheerful songs on platforms like TikTok helps me relax and improves my mood by reducing stress.

× Although I'm not a professional singer and I believe I have put some potential so I'm just listening every to improve my skill.

✓ Although I'm not a professional singer and I believe I have some potential, so I'm just listening every day to improve my skill.

The phrase 'I have put some potential' is incorrect; it should be 'I have some potential' to express possession. Also, 'listening every' is incomplete; it should be 'listening every day' to indicate frequency. The verb 'listening' is correctly used here as a gerund after 'I'm just'.

× For example, I've listened to my favorite song and try sing along.

✓ For example, I've listened to my favorite song and try to sing along.

The verb 'try' should be followed by the infinitive form 'to sing' rather than the bare verb 'sing'. This is a common verb pattern in English where 'try' is followed by 'to' plus the base verb.

× Actually, I have never learned how to sing because, you know, singing lessons are quite expensive and I couldn't afford them.

✓ Actually, I have never learned how to sing because, you know, singing lessons are quite expensive and I can't afford them.

The phrase 'I couldn't afford them' implies past inability, but the context suggests a present situation. Therefore, 'I can't afford them' is more appropriate to express current inability.

× Besides that, I think this is my normal hobby and it's not my potential about it, so I give up to become a singer.

✓ Besides that, I think this is my normal hobby and it's not my potential, so I give up becoming a singer.

The phrase 'not my potential about it' is incorrect; 'potential' is a noun and does not take 'about it'. Also, 'give up to become' is incorrect; the correct form is 'give up becoming' because 'give up' is followed by a gerund.

× Yeah, there's hard work for me because you know, I have a lot of person around me since my family or my friend.

✓ Yeah, there's hard work for me because you know, I have a lot of people around me like my family and my friends.

The word 'person' is singular; the plural form 'people' should be used to indicate multiple individuals. Also, 'since' is incorrectly used; 'like' or 'such as' is better to list examples.

× But all of this I would love to sing for my family because you know, they always support me and encourage my passion for me.

✓ But with all of this, I would love to sing for my family because, you know, they always support me and encourage my passion.

The phrase 'all of this' is vague and should be 'with all of this' to indicate despite difficulties. Also, 'encourage my passion for me' is redundant; 'encourage my passion' is sufficient.

× So I want to sing a lot of songs so because I feel proud and happy in the way they show me my grades too.

✓ So I want to sing a lot of songs because I feel proud and happy when they show me my grades too.

The phrase 'so because' is redundant; only 'because' is needed. Also, 'in the way they show me my grades' is awkward; 'when they show me my grades' is clearer.

× Yes of course, I think singing an can definitely bring happiness to almost people.

✓ Yes, of course, I think singing can definitely bring happiness to almost all people.

The article 'an' before 'can' is incorrect and should be removed. Also, 'almost people' is incomplete; 'almost all people' is the correct phrase.

× For example, when I listen to a happy rhythm or happy songs on Tiktok, on other platforms so happens to relax and so few more cheerful singing.

✓ For example, when I listen to a happy rhythm or happy songs on TikTok or other platforms, it helps me relax and feel more cheerful.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'So happens to relax and so few more cheerful singing' is ungrammatical. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× Listening to can improve our mood and reduce stress.

✓ Listening to music can improve our mood and reduce stress.

The phrase 'Listening to' is incomplete; it needs an object such as 'music' to be grammatically correct.