Singing— Part 1 Relatório

Sugestão: Ваш ответ немного длинный и содержит лишние детали, которые не напрямую отвечают на вопрос. Старайтесь давать более естественные и краткие ответы, избегая повторений и ненужных подробностей.

Exemplo: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. When I was a child, I used to pretend the TV remote was a microphone and sing along to my favorite songs.

Sugestão: Ответ хороший, но можно сделать его более связным, используя связующие слова и избегая повторений. Также стоит использовать более разнообразную лексику.

Exemplo: No, I have never formally learnt how to sing because I was busy studying engineering. Singing has always been a hobby, but now I prefer to focus on my studies and explore new fields like science and engineering.

Sugestão: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и повторения, что снижает его естественность. Рекомендуется строить предложения проще и использовать связующие слова для плавности.

Exemplo: I don't consider myself a good singer, so I prefer to sing only for close friends and family who I trust and who won't judge me harshly.

Sugestão: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность и разнообразить лексику, чтобы звучать более естественно и уверенно.

Exemplo: Definitely yes. Singing often brings joy to people, especially at parties where many dance and sing along to their favorite songs. Personally, I also start singing whenever I hear a good melody.

× When I was a child, I usually took the remote controller of the television and imagined that this is a microphone and I started singing.

✓ When I was a child, I usually took the remote controller of the television and imagined that it was a microphone and I started singing.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'This is a microphone' should be in past tense 'it was a microphone' to maintain consistency with the past narrative.

× No, I did not because I was busy with other studies like engineering.

✓ No, I did not because I was busy with other studies like engineering.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× Singing was just a hobby when I was a child, but now I'm more focused on studying and learning something new.

✓ Singing was just a hobby when I was a child, but now I'm more focused on studying and learning something new.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× I my singing is not really skilled.

✓ My singing is not really skilled.

The pronoun 'I' is redundant and incorrectly placed before 'my singing'. Removing 'I' corrects the sentence.

× So that's why if I get to sing, I'm gonna sing only for my for close people who I whom I trust and I know what they won't judge me for bad singing.

✓ So that's why if I get to sing, I'm gonna sing only for my close people whom I trust and who I know won't judge me for bad singing.

The sentence has redundant and misplaced pronouns 'I' and 'for'. Also, 'who' is the correct relative pronoun for people as the subject of the clause, and 'whom' as the object. The phrase 'for bad singing' should be 'for bad singing' without 'for' before 'close people'.

× Definitely yes.

✓ Definitely, yes.

A comma is needed after 'Definitely' to separate the adverb from the interjection 'yes' for clarity.

× For example, when it comes to the parties, many people Just Dance and sing when it comes to their favorite songs.

✓ For example, when it comes to parties, many people just dance and sing when their favorite songs play.

The word 'Just' should not be capitalized. Also, 'the parties' is better as 'parties' without 'the' for generalization. The phrase 'when it comes to their favorite songs' is awkward; 'when their favorite songs play' is clearer.

× And to be honest, I just described myself because when I hear a good melody, I start to sing.

✓ And to be honest, I just described myself because when I hear a good melody, I start singing.

The phrase 'I just described myself' is awkward and unclear. It would be better to say 'I can relate to that' or 'That describes me'. Also, 'I start to sing' is acceptable but 'I start singing' is more natural here.